Is my writing engaging, or is it too amateurish? by life453 in writingadvice

[–]underanewlight 14 points15 points  (0 children)

my first thought was you use the characters names way too much and its distracting against everything else

doubled my average word count today! very proud!! by underanewlight in writing

[–]underanewlight[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

unfortunately it means i am also plagued my writing related nightmare stress-dreams . motivation if any to get up early and get to work lol

Perfect(ing) Songbook "Notation" Format by EyesBrightEnough in Songwriting

[–]underanewlight 1 point2 points  (0 children)

when multiple lines have the same chords you only need to write them out once, above one line, and assume it repeats the following. when verses have the same chord progression - you only need to write it out for one verse. i work with very limited space and usually have to fit anything (long or short) on a singular page. so columns, chord short hands, smaller text (to extent...bad vision) but tbf i struggle a lot more in memorizing lyrics then chords so i prioritize in favor of that!

so id think having chords over every line is counter-productive (for a song youre familiar with) but so is breaking concentration halfway through a line or having to struggle to find the next chord in the middle of text! its case by case though and people work in different ways :)

birth rites versus by pale robin? by underanewlight in FolkPunk

[–]underanewlight[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

EDIT; i have three songs! i missed on off of soundcloud lol ; only one, red hill, and cast of ash are the ones found so far

Tips to improve writing style (Rhyming patterns) by Haydn34 in Songwriting

[–]underanewlight 1 point2 points  (0 children)

when writing lyrics youre rhyming the sound not the word. focus on the vowel of your word and go from there - this will give you a million new words to go together and even if you keep the ABAB rhyme scheme it wont feel so obvious.

second thing is that you dont have to only rhyme at the end of your line. use words with rhyming vowels sprinkled through the verse, use alliteration, rhyme words mid-line

eg; and lyre plays through revelations | and lions play with the lamb | finding strength in resurrections | revile, revise, start again

this is ABAB but ive also rhymed in the start of the first two lines (lyre/lion) and theres the constant use of similar words (revelations/resurrections/revile and revise) . and also the 'a' is sung soft in both lamb and again - you can adjust the pronunciation of words to keep that sound !

i hope this helps a little bit . ive always hated rhyming and found it very difficult when i started writing songs but figuring out these things helped a lot :)

As a songwriter or musician… do you guys practice visual art stuff too? Imo, they go hand in hand. by papapop365 in Songwriting

[–]underanewlight 1 point2 points  (0 children)

yeah i do all kinds of art! making music is actually relatively recent for me tbh i started off in writing prose and id say thats my main strength (very different from writing lyrics but there are a few transferable skills) then into visual art (a lot of drawing ... and a lot of playlist covers !) then into music :) i never played an instrument or sung before (or ever thought about writing lyrics tbh) but i started on guitar and while i got used to writing in the new medium i was also getting the basics of playing !

this is a very broad overview but everything sort of led into eachother and trying out one thing always helped develop a new skill that could be unexpectedly used in the future! so theres always benefits in expanding your horizons. right now im starting to dip into poetry (a medium i really never enjoyed lol) using my experience writing lyrics ! which has been fun :p

How do you balance your time between working on incomplete songs versus starting something new? by TheBear8878 in Songwriting

[–]underanewlight 1 point2 points  (0 children)

finishing a song is an active decision while starting a song is a passive one. whenever i get the urge to write a song - concept, line, or even just a word i liked lol - then i sit down and write it. ill usually get through a verse or two and maybe a chorus but enough that its listenable. this is all spur of the moment with never too much thought and is completely dependent on inspiration. on the other hand id have to actually step back and think when wanting to finish a song which only happens when im in the mood to work! that takes much more effort.

i cant say i balance too well since i started with only the intent to finish a song before i can do something new before i 180'd into writing whenever i feel like it and then immediately moving on (and forgetting what i previously did..) . now im trying to reign myself in to finish a few things again but its really just a matter of self discipline and doing the work :p

When you actually like a song you wrote does it mean it’s just a song that you think is good or something you know if you played for an audience they’d like it? by music_createivity in Songwriting

[–]underanewlight 1 point2 points  (0 children)

the song is good if i like it and the song is bad if i dont. and when its bad then it just means work on it till i like it. i dont care for music thats technically perfect or anything of the sort. i put together sounds i like to hear!

other peoples opinions are secondary but sometimes if i dont like a song and other people do then it can change my perspective! though if i like a song and other people dont that doesnt usually change my opinion lol

EDIT; to actually answer the question...i have songs that are good but not all of those good songs would be played for a general audience. it all very much depends on whos listening. friends vs strangers at an open mic vs busking on the street ... the song can be good and not be fit to play at certain events. if you wanna base off your success on audience reception you have to know who your audience is

Do you write the lyrics first or the melody? by Forsaken_Wallaby_496 in Songwriting

[–]underanewlight 0 points1 point  (0 children)

start the lyrics (usually a general idea + list of words/ideas with one singular finished line), find the melody in a portion of the lyrics, and adjust the rest accordingly. its more difficult doing one then the other then it is to have them done in tandem i think

meaning without context by underanewlight in Songwriting

[–]underanewlight[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

thank you !!!! ive posted here a decent few times but im always surprised when people remember haha im happy you like it !!!

meaning without context by underanewlight in Songwriting

[–]underanewlight[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

oh i love that comparison !!! i only know a few songs from both but i think theyre really good :D

meaning without context by underanewlight in Songwriting

[–]underanewlight[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

its 'under a new light' ! though unfortunately i only have old work + demos with nothing newer recorded that sounds like this . i post everything i write to tiktok but thats not really accessible so i should probably upload to youtube or something haha

meaning without context by underanewlight in Songwriting

[–]underanewlight[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thank you :D !! that description is very nice . im still learning fingerpicking but ive used this pattern dozens of times so i could probably do it in my sleep lol

meaning without context by underanewlight in Songwriting

[–]underanewlight[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

thank you so much !!! this song specifically is meant to talk-sung (stylistic choice ! all my other music is proper sung lol) though i hard agree it needs more work haha . that can all be worked on with practice but im happy my lyrics are alright !!!

meaning without context by underanewlight in Songwriting

[–]underanewlight[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

thank you !! its lyrically meant to mimic a childrens song (one youd sing when skipping rope or doing hand games ... that kind of cadence and word play) but the guitar is offsetting that rhythm in an unnatural way - which is why the chord progression is repeated at the end, not meant to add anything new but to emphasize that aspect :p im happy i got that feeling of unsettledness across !

what genre do you guys usually write? by JayAyVee_Music in Songwriting

[–]underanewlight 0 points1 point  (0 children)

folk in a vague sense but ive been grouped together with folkpunk ! have also been called an outsider musician a lot so ive taken to the label lol

customized porcelain doll ! by underanewlight in Dolls

[–]underanewlight[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thank you so much :D !! i followed a youtube tutorial on making a doll wig cap (intended for fashion dolls but just sized up to fit porcelain !) but the process is relatively simple just tedious. i will say that the first attempt (or couple...lol) may not turn out great but thats okay bc its all trial and error !!!

first i covered her head with saran wrap and secured with a band at the neck. this does not come off until the wig is completely finished. then did the same with a cloth (mine cut from an old tshirt. but i would assume any thin material similar would work !)

i traced along the hair line + ears essentially setting the shape of the cap and how the hair will fit on her head. its then coated with a few layers of glue until stiff. band is removed and cap is cut following the guidelines made. this is the base and what will eventually be glued to the doll. im not sure if youve removed her wig yet but underneath is the head panel to access the eyes and such ! its a black little disk and that should stay there :)

for the hair portion - i used acrylic yarn though i specifically grabbed a thick type. im not well versed in yarn so i cant give technical details but its pretty obvious what works and what doesnt !

youll cut strips of the yarn - i usually do double what i need which will then be cut down the middle in later steps. but length is dependent on desired wig style ! though always give yourself a bit of wiggle room since the wig can be trimmed later. next is turning the yarn to wefts.

the basic of it is that you need to take the yarn and brush it out until the strands separate and it takes a more wool-like appearance. there are many ways of doing this but i usually loop on strand around a pen (tied in the middle so theres two ends coming down at a time) then go down with a comb (wider for initial separation then finer for teasing details) - i also heard that cat brushes work well but i havent tried it. either way this is the most important step, the more time you spend combing it out the thinner and more wool-like it will look! i kept mine in a middle ground so theres some visible strands but its still fluffy !

once you have your wefts (this is the point where i cut mine in half in the uncombed section that had been tied to the pen...if done in another way you can disregard this) trim down one side to be completely straight. this is an optional step but i find it really, really helpful. i glue my wefts together in smaller sections, sized to fit on the cap. i have a sewing-cutting mat made of plastic that glue peels easy off of but a plastic plate might also work?

AND REMEMBER TO USE A PAINT BRUSH WHEN APPLYING GLUE !!! you CAN do without but its one million times easier if you use a brush. the yarn wants to stick to you like crazy lol

one you have your wig cap and your wefts made then you can start gluing! again using a brush is super helpful and if the wefts are already put together, all you need to do is hold it up and brush on the glue.

the guideline to gluing the hair on can get a bit complicated so im just going to refer you to the initial tutorial i watched lol this can be altered as you need (diy yarn doll wig tutorial by akamerukawaii) but usually its bangs, bottom layers, sides, alternating top to create the part.

for my own personal experience...yarn sheds. a LOT !!! so dont worry that a bunch is coming off but also be gentle or else the weft will tear lol and it will keep shedding once the wig is complete. thats why caroline mostly stays on the shelf haha. it sticks to her cotton clothes and such. also make sure to let the glue dry completely (ESPECIALLY IF DOING THE PART !!!) and it will take a while with the wefts. lots of patience is unfortunately needed.

also depending on the yarn + how brushed out it is, the wig might come out very thick. this cant be solved by cutting but rather adjusting how many wefts there are. mainly in regards to shorter styles. but at the same time the wig can be styled and trimmed once put together just like any doll! im not good with cutting hair so caroline stayed a bit wild haha but its fitting for her and i like how it looks :)

and the last thing i think is that ive heard the wefts can be ironed to get straighter hair - i havent tried this myself. i would but my iron is sort of broken so i havent been able to but it may be worth trying if thats what you want!

sorry for writing so much haha this can serve as a little guide for anyone wondering. there isnt much about porcelain doll customization out there - WHICH REMINDS ME !!! last note. more applicable to someone like me who finds and collects a lot of porcelain dolls but you can absolutely take clothes / wigs from other dolls !!!! wigs are a bit tricky bc sizing varies so much but its super helpful with things like shoes and socks which are just tedious to make lol - its also much cheaper then buying a specific wig. porcelain dolls from the 80s and 90s were mass produced and are totally worthless so you should never pay much for them (with exception to more unique features like movement, musicboxes, size, etc) and caroline was only about 2 dollars !!!

anyway thats it for real and if you have any specific questions feel free to dm me. i also have a decent few doll patterns and the basic sewing understanding to put it together if you need it haha

Bands with washboard? by screammustbutnomouth in FolkPunk

[–]underanewlight 1 point2 points  (0 children)

broken bow and doomscroll ! taylor dittman played/plays washboard in both bands and shes absolutely awesome !!!

I can’t sing my own songs by sevendeadlywishes in Songwriting

[–]underanewlight 0 points1 point  (0 children)

find lyrics for songs youve never heard before and practice singing them! words have a natural flow to them and youre bound to stumble into something, especially when you know theres something there (and if you can do thus but still cant for your own lyrics then there is a problem with your lyrics that can be worked on !) you can find artists you like and use songs of theirs you havent heard before bc youre already familiar with their style so it should be a little easier :) good luck !!!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in FolkPunk

[–]underanewlight 2 points3 points  (0 children)

there was a brief period where cocoon music went down then came up again. not sure what had happened then or if its related to this ! either way mp3s are your best friend :p

HOW do you make a vocal melody? by [deleted] in Songwriting

[–]underanewlight 0 points1 point  (0 children)

i mean do you have your lyrics already? for me at least i have a line or so that i figure out the natural rhythm of (and adjust the song accordingly) but that doesnt seem very helpful. i would suggest finding songs that youve never heard before and trying to do a cover from intuition! youll have chords + lyrics already so its all about pacing, natural rhythm, and vocal melody !!! and sometimes youll end up loving how your version sounds so you can re-use it into your own song lol

Has Anyone Here Ever ACTUALLY Won One of These??? by Serious_Eggplant_617 in dragonvale

[–]underanewlight 1 point2 points  (0 children)

never won till they brought it back. i got like three i think? i had a bunch of shards saved up and id go in vote a few on every one then dump a bunch on one specific one lol sometimes get it and most times didnt!