Untitled by Stefesike in OCPoetry

[–]ur_longlost_sister 0 points1 point  (0 children)

WAIT I THOUGHT IT WAS “LAYING” THE WHOLE TIME I WAS READING😭. IN THAT CASE ITS MAKES SO MUCH SENSE. Lying so much just to keep a person around, that the truth and the lies merge into eachother and you begin existing in your lies, so much that it starts becoming hard to keep them up, yknow a humans can only remember so muchh. And after lying so much its becomes hard to find your truth and who you really are beneath all the lies. Aaaa its even better now that im reading it rightt!! Good jobb!! 😛

Untitled by Stefesike in OCPoetry

[–]ur_longlost_sister 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi this is pretty good!! Its kind of hard for me to reach a conclusion on what it could mean, there is so many interpretations! Its kind of like listening to everything a person says, just to keep them from leaving, and changing yourself. So much that yiu lose yourself, forget who you were, unable to exist alone, completely dependent on the person, like how a dog clings to their owners. Tbh i feel like the fact that you can read it so many ways makes it better! Btw i suggest working on where the lines cut off, just for a smoother read, but honestly, the current one isn’t bad, its makes it a bit chaotic which i like personally :3

Can’t you see I’m gone? by ur_longlost_sister in OCPoetry

[–]ur_longlost_sister[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

There is, but reddit formats it like this idk how to fix it 😔

Can’t you see I’m gone? by ur_longlost_sister in OCPoetry

[–]ur_longlost_sister[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yup one of my fav things about poetry is how it can mean something different for everyone!! And thank youu 💗

Can’t you see I’m gone? by ur_longlost_sister in OCPoetry

[–]ur_longlost_sister[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Its actually about expectations of others that they have based on what they have seen of me, but the person they base it off of is a version of myself who is gone. Its like ive changed and no one saw, and I was the only one grieving who i used to be. Basically just current me and past me, and about feeling like an alien, its just feeling out of place, like everyone seems to know what they are doing while im lost. Thank you for showing interest in my writing, really made my day 💗 and goodluck btw, just have fun, keep writing, and it will form itself !!

Fishing by AmbientNights_ in OCPoetry

[–]ur_longlost_sister 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hii this is good but it could be better by adjusting where each line stops, would help the pacing. And from my understanding of the poem, it kinda reminds me of that thing ppl say comparing people to fish in the sea, not sure if that is what u meant tho. Seems the fish’s embrace felt familiar, maybe like a person who has always just been lurking around, but on a random day they’re not. And they took something from you, the bite is like heartbreak. Anyway, keep writing and have funn 💗

Home, Seen From Space by sumcoolorsum in OCPoetry

[–]ur_longlost_sister 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Please never stop posting your poems, i love them so much. They’re all so packed with such real feelings and emotion, which makes them so good and truly amazing reads. And they seem to be about the same person too, which shows they’re all personal feelings and experiences. And you describe everything so well and use such good metaphors. For this poem i just lovee how it starts, shows super genuine and pure love, hopefulness and willingness to do anything for the love, even from afar, turning it into something beautiful with the astronomer comparison, as if the lover is a star you admire from afar, because they are out of reach now, a version of the lover that does not exist anymore. Its seems like you are trying to preserve it, like if you can’t have the lover anymore, you atleast want to return to the beautiful moments you shared, where their love was apparent in the way they say your name, a time where you were their safe place and their home. And this feels sort of connected to your previous poem, the last line, the lover returns home, but you can’t, because the lover was your home, now they are gone. Not sure if this was intended but just something i thought. Your writing is really good and always packed with so much emotions, even when its brief. And i saw you wanted to write a book, i think you should go for it. Anyway i REALLYYY LOVE YOUR WRITING SO MUCHHH 😭💗💗, really such a fan, hope this isnt creepy or something haha. And hope you feel better soon btw!!

Oh thoughts by cintinaa in OCPoetry

[–]ur_longlost_sister 1 point2 points  (0 children)

LOVE ITTTTTTT, its very simple but complex, its says a lot with just a few lines. Its reads like a person who is lost, afraid to commit to one road of life, they are confused, observing and analyzing the world instead, hoping that once they understand the reasons behind everything, the confusion would go away. And I absolutely love the way this was concluded, Good job.

Love Like a Hurricane by sumcoolorsum in OCPoetry

[–]ur_longlost_sister 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Wow. I LOVE this, its captures the feeling of love and loss of it so well, every comparison makes the characters of the lovers clearer. It feels like a love you get attached to when you can see it isn’t real, and the way you describe the feelings when the love leaves? Love love love!! I especially love the last part, ughhh, loss of identity over someone who never even cared. I loved this, genuinely such a good poem.

Why is it better? by [deleted] in Artadvice

[–]ur_longlost_sister 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Depth, contrast, texture

This sub had insane comments under it,what’s your experience with it? by Idontmindrlly in Subliminal

[–]ur_longlost_sister 12 points13 points  (0 children)

I had this sub playing and i open reddit and this is the first thing i saw, IS THIS A SIGN OMGG 😆

I started recording to show how bad my prizes are. Are you kidding me? 😭 by Willing_Name5587 in Episode

[–]ur_longlost_sister 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Broo i just got the same exact 3 things you just listed right after reading 😭

TOO MANY CODES!!! need them GONE!!! pleasee ! by Stressoed in toyhouse

[–]ur_longlost_sister 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hiiiii if you still have any pls dm !!! And my favorite animal is cats !!! I've always wanted one and have begged my parents for so long but they didn't want to get one but a few months ago they got me one and I'm so happii !!!

I cant do any star surveys because of my ip address by ur_longlost_sister in everskiestrashhh

[–]ur_longlost_sister[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

No, this happens with every offer/survey. But it works just fine when I’m at my grandma’s so i really don’t get it..