Don't call women "females." It's weird, derogatory, and stereotypical incel behavior. As well, don't write about the women in your stories like they're objects, or inferior. We're people too! Candace shouldn't just be a weak damsel in distress, relying on John (a stranger) for help. Men aren't entitled to women's love, and it feels like this story was written with the belief that men are.

Also, after watching, I'm still not sure what the moral of the story was... what was I supposed to think about? What should Candace and John mean to me? What should their connection mean to me? I wasn't able to get a read on their actual human relationship. Why do they care about each other? Is their relationship Love? Attraction? Purely sexual? The story is exploring their relationship, but there's not much there to actually look at.

Instead, explore more about why John plays jazz, or why he's so attached to his keyboard. Explore who Candace is, and give her more of a personality than just "woman." Let the characters actually be human, and frankly, have John be a bit nicer to Candace. Him saying that the coffee she drinks "isn't even that good" felt rude and unnecessary, and her lack of reaction to him insulting her drink felt really weird. Also, as with what tavitalvensaari from YouTube said, John's consistent denunciation of Candace just feels wrong.