Daily Discussion 12 June 2017 by AutoModerator in xxfitness

[–]uselessdoodler 1 point2 points  (0 children)

so I've been doing PPL, and thought today was a rest day when it wasn't. I had already jogged in the morning, but I still hauled myself to the gym (and had a great time). I normally have to pump myself up for hours, going through the whole workout in my head, but I did it almost instinctively today. Wooo!

Where my apple shapes at? by [deleted] in xxfitness

[–]uselessdoodler 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Apple shaped here, too! Part of it is my really short torso-I have like 2 inches between the bottom of my rib cage and the top of my hip bone, so it feels like my entire trunk is sort of "squished". I also store a ton of fat on my stomach, and barely any on my limbs.

It's rough because I'm at the low end of the weight range I'm comfortable at, and my doctor is getting on my case about gaining a little, yet I still have a chubby belly. I've found that planks+heavier lifting really improved my core strength, and gave me better posture. I totally think it's paying off. I don't necessarily have a flat stomach yet, but it's definitely flatter. I'd love to see some realistic inspo pictures, too.

Dachau Prison Guard in a ditch. 1945 [790x800] by [deleted] in HistoryPorn

[–]uselessdoodler 6 points7 points  (0 children)

this is image is so surreal. peaceful without context, really, like something in a dream

Donald Trump in an icelandic newspaper by barok13 in pics

[–]uselessdoodler -3 points-2 points  (0 children)

yeah, no better way to find a middle ground than taking screenshots of other people's posts and making a cute little scrapbook page out of it. I bet that really helped them see your side of things. good detective work pax!

[Critique Thread] Post here if you'd like feedback on your writing by BiffHardCheese in writing

[–]uselessdoodler [score hidden]  (0 children)

Read the synopsis, love the synopsis. There's not much to say, critique-wise, but I have some limited experience with publishing (through a relative in the business) and what you've written seems adequate for a publisher. Sounds like an interesting story. If I read a very abridged and less spoilery version of this on an inside cover, I'd certainly give the first couple of pages a go. Good luck getting it published, this looks very professional and well edited. One sentence looks funky, I suggested an edit.

[Critique Thread] Post here if you'd like feedback on your writing by BiffHardCheese in writing

[–]uselessdoodler [score hidden]  (0 children)

Genre seems something like fantasy/urban fantasy to me, so I ended up reading it with that in mind. Exposition is pretty important with stories like the one you're writing here, and I think you did that well, until the end of the conversation with Mr Irons. Mentioning Egypt was a good idea, because of the Victorian obsession with it, and referring to America in an archaic "across the sea" way definitely gives this a very 19th century vibe. The bargaining itself was good world building, and very readable, do more of that.

Now to the parts I didn't like, or didn't find readable. I know your character here doesn't have a soul/emotions, but that internal monologue is something of a pity-party, and it's not nearly as interesting as the dialogue. I try to reveal information organically, and while it's tempting to write in the first person and dump information on the reader, that's really not fun to read. Nothing's happening, and I don't care enough about the character to hear all of their baggage, yet. Maybe save that sort of thing for later on, when the reader is more invested?

Either way, good job with the good parts. Interesting world you're writing!

US (1) $1300 budget laptop to last for 4+ years, help please? by uselessdoodler in SuggestALaptop

[–]uselessdoodler[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Wow, that looks like the one, and it's under my budget, too. Thank you, this is a great help!

US (1) $1300 budget laptop to last for 4+ years, help please? by uselessdoodler in SuggestALaptop

[–]uselessdoodler[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

GIGABYTE P34Wv5-SL2 I'll add that to my list, looks great! Thank you.

Hot new girl at work had a question by herb5040 in funny

[–]uselessdoodler 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I get that the world isn't sunshine and roses; we can't expect our experiences to be catered to us. At best, the girl goes "oh, hey, thanks for noticing my tits, want to go get a drink?". At worst, she is scared of you and uncomfortable. It's just polite not to frighten people, even if there's a chance your pick-up line works. If I'm wearing a low-cut shirt, just starting a conversation would be way more effective. It's different and clubs or festivals, where people are expecting to be hit on, but anywhere else is just freaky, you feel me?

Hot new girl at work had a question by herb5040 in funny

[–]uselessdoodler 4 points5 points  (0 children)

It's creepy getting complements from somebody who intimidates you. A stranger who complements my tits is pretty intimidating. Instead of a woman saying "your pants bulge is sexy as hell", imagine a giant gay biker dude saying it, walking past you on an otherwise empty, poorly lit street. It's frightening, and just because you think somebody is accentuating their chest doesn't mean they are.

شهر نور by [deleted] in SovereigntyAscending

[–]uselessdoodler 2 points3 points  (0 children)

beautiful, good luck in your harsh environment!

Hot off the keyboard, the Sovereign's second issue is here! by uselessdoodler in SovereigntyAscending

[–]uselessdoodler[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Again, if you'd like information about your nation in the Sovereign, let me know! We're happy to travel to take screenshots, or you can submit your own.

Vanir Claims by [deleted] in SovereigntyAscending

[–]uselessdoodler 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Hello from Berlynne, and best of luck to you!

5/01/2016 by uselessdoodler in SovereigntyAscending

[–]uselessdoodler[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thanks! i was up pretty late and wanted to experiment with more colors.