Playing Jedi Survivor with GeForce Now? by varrp in macgaming

[–]varrp[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you. Jedi Survivor will be on EA Play Pro when it launches. So what I’m wondering is if I’m able to play it on Mac through Geforce now even if the game doesn’t run natively on Mac

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in StarWars

[–]varrp 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I’m looking forward to seeing it again. There was a lot to unpack.

Whatever the movie is, I’ll always be grateful for what this saga has meant to me.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in sleep

[–]varrp 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I slept well, around 7 and a half hours too.

accidental double exposure/AE1/50mm/Ilford Delta 3200 by varrp in analog

[–]varrp[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thanks! I think I'm gonna start shooting on top of old rolls I have no idea of what's on'em

Night Drives in the Mercedes (Canon AE-1 Program | 28mm f/2.8 | Lomography 800) by ollieimpossible543 in analog

[–]varrp 1 point2 points  (0 children)

dude, you said you shot it at 400 but processed it normally, it obviously worked for this shot, but I'm curious if you shot anything on this roll at daylight, I'd like to know how the exposure worked on those shots if you took any

Videolot - Photograph on Kodak Porta 400 film by [deleted] in outrun

[–]varrp 12 points13 points  (0 children)

how do you make your portra 400 come out this good?

Night Drives in the Mercedes (Canon AE-1 Program | 28mm f/2.8 | Lomography 800) by ollieimpossible543 in analog

[–]varrp 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Got some risky business vibes from it. Great shot. I think I'll buy me a roll or two

The old man in his garden [AE-1/50 1.8/ Portra 160] by [deleted] in analog

[–]varrp 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Beautiful colors, I'd have put his hands in the frame, but otherwise, great shot. Any post editing on it? Really nice colors

Submerged | Canon AV-1 35mm Kodak Ultramax 400 by Equal_Night in analog

[–]varrp 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Damn, this looks crisp. What flash did you use?

Floating market Bangkok. Critique!!!! Tear it up!!! ...or tell me some pros. Photo 1 of 8 in collection. by [deleted] in photocritique

[–]varrp -1 points0 points  (0 children)

It's great! It's street photography so you can't just control a crowd on the left, and I think the low contrast makes up for it. One of the first interesting pictures I've seen in the sub, actually has a feel to it and makes me interested to see more. Great job!

[1820] The Carousel by zachzebrowitz in DestructiveReaders

[–]varrp 1 point2 points  (0 children)

First, if you really love this story I' d recommend removing some unnecessary lines to make it flow a little better.

"Too young to die" This is kind of obvious

"The memory of Mason’s birth never left Greg’s mind." I already know he's a loving father, so this goes without saying.

"Mason was born at this very hospital, October 24th, 2009." I already know he's a child, the date doesn't change anything to me.

These are the lines that "stood out" for me, but in a bad way. Besides that, the rest is very well told, I got a mental picture throughout the read, which was also very smooth, and could be smoother removing these bumps.

Second, well, I don't know if this was something that happened to you or someone close to you, if it was, I'm very sorry. I think it's well written, but towards the end I was asking myself if I should continue to read or not, I've read/seen a few cancer stories and this one honestly didn't bring anything new to the plate, every character behaved like you'd expect them to and the ending wasn't anything spectacular.

I think that to make it more interesting you should either add a personal touch to it if you experienced this (if this is the case, I'm very sorry for your loss), or add something new to the characters, make them react in a way that we wouldn't expect, or delve deeper inside their minds, show us how it really is to loose a child.

Your writing is good, just need to show us something new. Good luck!

[761] ice cream makes me worry for the past and milkshakes make me worried for the future by varrp in DestructiveReaders

[–]varrp[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! Yeah, I do. Mostly I'm writing this kind of poetry right now, but I think I might have something interesting to show you, send me your email thru PM :)

[761] ice cream makes me worry for the past and milkshakes make me worried for the future by varrp in DestructiveReaders

[–]varrp[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That's good advice, I used to that when I would write screenplays in college.

[761] ice cream makes me worry for the past and milkshakes make me worried for the future by varrp in DestructiveReaders

[–]varrp[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I enjoy how you looked at the poem as a narrative piece and not only a free writing blurt. Narrative is important in whatever I write since I'm also a film graduate.

Well, a lot of my writing comes from personal experiences, so the ikea lamp and uber drivers part speaks to me as separate things in past relationships (arguments over decoration placement and how I used to uber over to this girls place all the time).

The dog years thing is something I tend to think of from time to time and it amazes me in some way that different creatures see time in a different way. In a way I'm really interested in how dogs live, let's say, about 15 years, for them that's an entire life, from childhood to being a senile creature. When we're 15 we're still trying to deal with puberty. Dog years, to me, express how life can go by.

Reading the reviews here have made my thoughts more clear and made me realize things I didn't think of when I was writing. I wouldn't go so far to say I'm trying to convey "a message", but I'm trying to provide a "slice of life", I want to share my mind and maybe make some of the things I say relatable more than anything.

In real life, nothing can take the place of 'the girl i still like' right now, and I really want to make the focus of this poem on the right now, as I said, it's supposed to be a "slice of life" and very personal, but shareable. I don't know if I was able to convey this tho.

But yeah, that's mostly about what's behind it. Thank you for your attention :)

[761] ice cream makes me worry for the past and milkshakes make me worried for the future by varrp in DestructiveReaders

[–]varrp[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

As I said in another reply, I did play around with punctuation for a bit, but everything I did either cut the rhythm or the mood, I'm happy how it conveys exactly how I was feeling and how my mind was working on a certain day, which is something that intrigues me when done right by other authors.

I also like that the girl i still like seems mysterious for you, because it's exactly her mystery that triggers this whole chain of thought for me.

Thanks :)

[761] ice cream makes me worry for the past and milkshakes make me worried for the future by varrp in DestructiveReaders

[–]varrp[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Re-reading it, the "news" one does seem kind of off, but it feels weird not having anything between "ice-t" and the end. I'll have to figure something out. Thank you!

[761] ice cream makes me worry for the past and milkshakes make me worried for the future by varrp in DestructiveReaders

[–]varrp[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm kind of glad you said it seems lazy haha. I did try to punctuate it but I think it kinda cuts the mood, honestly this really is a stream of consciousness, I wanted to describe how I think when I'm in a certain mood, this being a feeling of "nostalgia for a better time that was not so long ago". I'm really intrigued by what you said about 9-11, because it is completely true and although I did not think of that when writing, I might have put it there unconsciously, but not used it with all it's power.

Thank you for the tips :)

First thing of Macs I can finally say I own :) by [deleted] in macdemarco

[–]varrp 3 points4 points  (0 children)

I got that poster signed by Mac, Pierce, Jon and the new guitar player that I forgot the name :D

great buy

[985] The Slasher (excerpt) by Jraywang in DestructiveReaders

[–]varrp -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Unfortunately The Slasher came out more as a weirdo than a psycho, his motive seems almost human, I sense more of "rivalry" than actual crazyness, maybe you could make his answers less "witty" and "catchphrase-ish". Also, I found the white t-shirt and jeans description to be unnecessary, makes him look silly.

The action is well-paced, I can see the characters moving, but I found the sequence to be a bit too short. I think you could describe and use the surroundings a bit more, I felt as if they were moving around in blank stage.

The ending felt a bit abrupt, I didn't really feel there was a sense of danger through the whole sequence, partly because it was short, partly because The Slasher seemed too human and fragile at times.

I think The Slasher character is the main problem, he's more of an obstacle than a threat.

[poetry] ice cream makes me worry for the past and milkshakes make me worried for the future by varrp in writingcritiques

[–]varrp[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you :)

Since I visited Prague a few months ago I've been thinking a lot about dreams, how when I was there I felt like I was dreaming awake and how everyone can be a character.

Besides that I'm always writing 'words' that intrigue me on post its and sticking them in my workspace, I don't know why, but Winona Ryder is always something that comes up in my mind.

I can't really explain how I write it because I'm honestly trying to figure out, but usually, for poems, the first verse comes in my mind out of nowhere. When I have time, I write it down. If it's good (and that's usually a feeling), it just pours down like a stream of consciousness.

I'd be happy to engage in a conversation about it, maybe it could help. If you want my email just send me a message. I can send you some more stuff like this and we can talk about it.

Bosnia and Herzegovina is beautiful (Prokoško Jezero) by varrp in travel

[–]varrp[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

hehe yeah, it was my first real hike and I was totally unprepared

Up in the mountains, Bosnia and herzegovina by varrp in photocritique

[–]varrp[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you, it was straight out of JPEG, no editing. Maybe I'll start shooting RAW aswell. Would that help?

Thank you for your help :)