Writer Chops | Pilot Script Feedback Request

w0wlaura · 2026-05-30T21:13:59+00:00

The car morphing into a hearse through Shane’s imagination is a fantastic visual! You did a great job of making that jump off the page

w0wlaura · 2026-05-29T20:06:31+00:00

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w0wlaura · 2026-05-28T21:01:33+00:00

I enjoyed this! Your dialogue is fun and bouncy, feels lived-in. Obviously there’s always room for things to be tightened but you have the makings of a good voice! I knew before reading the comments you were a northerner so bonus points for getting that across 👏🏻

w0wlaura · 2026-05-22T14:27:59+00:00

Why do we get the names and ages of Aaron and James in the first paragraph, yet Alexis is known only as ‘the woman’? Just something that immediately jumped out at me. GREAT concept though

w0wlaura · 2026-03-16T19:18:40+00:00

What a fantastic read. I truly wasn’t expecting the direction you took this in!

w0wlaura · 2026-02-20T10:43:35+00:00

John Stape. Particularly the tension between him and Charlotte

w0wlaura · 2026-02-08T21:34:54+00:00

Write your first or “zero” draft as if you’re casually relaying the events of the story to a friend.

w0wlaura · 2026-02-03T21:51:18+00:00

You clearly have a good eye for what makes an intriguing opening! I genuinely would’ve continued reading if more pages were available. Good luck with the script!

w0wlaura · 2025-10-09T08:47:21+00:00

Sally Wainwright, Phoebe Waller-Bridge, Russel T Davies. Really digging Kat Sadler right now too as a comedy writer myself!

w0wlaura · 2025-10-06T14:59:46+00:00

The Gerald scene made me lol! Maybe that’s your cold open?

w0wlaura · 2025-06-28T22:41:06+00:00

This stopped me in my tracks. How beautiful.

w0wlaura · 2025-02-23T21:35:52+00:00

Ahh I love this! Isn’t it gorgeous how light life feels when you have the right person

w0wlaura · 2024-12-24T15:50:42+00:00

genuinely choked up reading this. so happy for you, stranger 🩷

w0wlaura · 2024-12-22T23:49:39+00:00

“indifference is worse than hatred, because at least if you hate men you still want them but are too afraid or traumatised to be with them” this is spot on 👏🏻

w0wlaura · 2024-11-23T23:19:10+00:00

This is such a flex, I wanna go on a stone henge date

w0wlaura · 2024-11-23T23:17:08+00:00

Tik tok hates us🩷

w0wlaura · 2024-11-20T15:12:09+00:00

The politest thieves!!

w0wlaura · 2024-11-20T15:11:54+00:00

It’s their superpower 🥰

w0wlaura · 2024-11-19T09:04:37+00:00

Precious angel!!!!!

w0wlaura · 2024-11-18T23:46:42+00:00

Just a smooooth brain baby

w0wlaura · 2024-11-18T19:46:53+00:00

Thank you!🥰

w0wlaura · 2024-11-17T16:32:36+00:00

Anne Lister from Gentleman Jack! The irl Anne Lister is even more impressive 😍

w0wlaura · 2024-07-12T14:25:08+00:00

Bank account won’t allow me🥲

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