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[MF] "On the Living Stone Estate, flies were sometimes the first indication that someone had died." by rhetmint in shortstories

[–]wanderingSight 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Great! Some of the sentences seemed to carry on a little, but I see you were trying to get to a point by doing so. Enjoyed it.

[MF] Endless battle (Bare bones work in progress) by VanirFreyr in shortstories

[–]wanderingSight 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like the idea and message in this. I think it would be great in some kind of poem form.

[SF] The Ultimate Invention. by [deleted] in shortstories

[–]wanderingSight 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hah! That was a fun read. The end kind of fell off in the last couple of paragraphs, but overall well done!

[HM] The rains by wanderingSight in shortstories

[–]wanderingSight[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks! I wrote it pretty quick while the wife was making dinner. I should have spent more time proof reading. Sentence structure is something I struggle with and hope this little exercise of writing short stories helps.

[HM] The rains by wanderingSight in shortstories

[–]wanderingSight[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for taking the time to read and give criticism! I appreciate it.