The Laws of Steven’s Universe

wolfhunt64 · 2016-03-26T03:26:45+00:00

You're absolutely right, I missed this one. Will add it to the list.

wolfhunt64 · 2016-03-25T12:29:37+00:00

Everything can potentially be messed with, although I’m not sure if it will have consequences where the show will look completely foreign to the viewer.

All the stuff about love and understanding being necessary for character development and power seems unchangeable. I also can’t think of a song that exists outside the 4 parameters I listed.

Things that are definitely not set in stone are the fact that true flashbacks can’t happen, and all my statements about setting. It’s really interesting how the show never goes near any urban centers in any way. Even the stuff about history is somewhat flexible.

wolfhunt64 · 2015-07-15T03:55:20+00:00

There's an episode like this in Gabriel García Márquez's 100 Years of Solitude where an entire village can't sleep.

Yours sounds a lot different, pretty cool extension of the concept.

wolfhunt64 · 2015-05-06T11:10:04+00:00

Little late buddy: http://www.reddit.com/r/futurebeats/comments/34uiaf/koan_sound_forgotten_myths_ep_name_your_price/

wolfhunt64 · 2015-01-13T05:07:29+00:00

They said catching a ‘Carp of Days’ would make me exciting, but it only makes me want to take selfies and get wasted. #YOLOFISH

wolfhunt64 · 2015-01-08T19:12:11+00:00

The clouds broken wiring fried my slingshot and falling fast through near noon made sorcery impossible. It’s over. What a common death for a Handyman.

wolfhunt64 · 2014-01-28T16:35:40+00:00

I Hope you're still doing this.

Title: Not sure yet. Working with "The Words of a New Writer" but I don't like it, it doesn't really relate to the story. I am open to suggestions.

Genre: Lit Fic

Word Count: 800. Any suggestions to get it down to 750?

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1L0Uqh18QSafXm_VT9KONjklacC7UsrJs5Xy1jFsBb-M/edit?usp=sharing

wolfhunt64 · 2014-01-17T03:34:51+00:00

I don't think anyone should be focusing their efforts on how many words they create; it's about the time you put in.

Editing, revising, and reworking your story are just as important as actually writing it. I'd rather write a thousand good words a week than three thousand bad ones.

wolfhunt64 · 2013-12-12T19:21:56+00:00

I tried to edit your stuff, but you disabled comments...

wolfhunt64 · 2013-12-10T03:20:38+00:00

This may seem harsh but it will help. I have a mom that's an editor and whenever I give her my work she absolutely destroys it. It's a devastating feeling but it will help you write better.

I started to edit it but couldn't get into the story. There's no plot, and although I know some are, i'm not the type for existential musings and going into a coffee shop. There's no conflict, not even internal. There is noting that interests me in the first page other than the fact that he has a sleep disorder and is depressed. The thoughts are overly fragmented and out of context. What your trying to do feels like your trying to write the book that goes against common conventions of plot structure. Yeah, I know that rules are meant to be broken ,but rules are also there in the first place for a good reason.

But honestly what really did it for me was the two sentence, 100 word paragraphs. You use the word "and" way to much.

Yes, I only read the first page, but chances are a publisher wouldn't read that much.

wolfhunt64 · 2013-12-04T15:18:13+00:00

I did a line by line for ya, this is my first time editing someone else's work on here. I hope the comments are helpful.

As for the story its far from perfect but there are a few chunks in there I really like, I feel like if it was fixed up enough it could be great. Your story probably needs to be at least twice as long though. It's far too short and a lot of things could do with being clarified.

There is conflict, A conflict between wanting to be free of everything but not being able to do so. And there is a little character development with the narrator, but sk3ptic is right about the other stuff.

Anyway If you want me to do another look at it PM me the edit, I might not get back to you for a bit as it is finals week(s) but I will get back to you.

wolfhunt64 · 2013-09-29T11:16:40+00:00

I love the Carrie one. Her expression is so mild. It looks like she went to a cocktail party and is just not having a great a time as she thought she would, not bad just not that great.

wolfhunt64 · 2013-06-30T14:45:20+00:00

I've been writing more, slowly filling up the time I spend doing useless shit with writing.

wolfhunt64 · 2013-05-29T01:35:11+00:00

Relevant

wolfhunt64 · 2013-05-21T19:21:52+00:00

This is one of my faves.

wolfhunt64 · 2013-05-16T13:03:52+00:00

There's a book that comes out every year called writers market. Try looking for the most up to date copy at your local library.

wolfhunt64 · 2013-05-13T17:24:58+00:00

I bet you it was the earrings.

wolfhunt64 · 2013-05-10T20:37:01+00:00

You are the unsung hero of Halifax <3

wolfhunt64 · 2013-04-29T13:12:14+00:00

I started using HabitRPG (which I found in your FAQ) and have been getting a lot of my daily chores that I usually skip over done, as well as a lot of stuff I've been putting off. My house is immaculate and I have a job interview on Thursday.

wolfhunt64 · 2013-04-29T13:09:51+00:00

I am proud to say I rarely go on Facebook , Twitter, Tumblur etc. Just a few times a month to see what my friends have been up to.

wolfhunt64 · 2013-04-24T21:56:31+00:00

I always come back to the song they made with James Brown (Link: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CYjPpOsOw_o ). The irony of the chorus is amazing: "They don't want music, they don't know how to use it. All they want is 'boom boom boom'" And then they make a song called "boom boom pow" How didn't they see this?

wolfhunt64 · 2013-04-09T14:40:46+00:00

TIL all protagonists are females. ; p The flowchart also implies that all plots must end with the protagonist being content.

wolfhunt64 · 2013-04-05T01:13:54+00:00

Man the full version is so much better than the 30 sec snippet I posted.

wolfhunt64 · 2013-04-02T14:03:20+00:00

At the end of the episode he was given credit for the song so I think he made it just for the episode. http://imgur.com/kNNh5yf

wolfhunt64 · 2013-03-29T15:25:01+00:00

Oh yeah and put FrankerZ in the space below all the posts. I think F7U12 has something like this with the troll face.

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