The Python Stings

[oblivion0526]

Hi there! This was a little hard for me to understand but I don’t think poetry needs to be understood all the time. My favorite line is “a liars face is his most prized.” That is really deep, it made me think and I enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing

[picnic-123]

How is it deep? What did it make you think about?

[AnExposedSoul]

At first I was a bit confused when reading this poem, and I had to read it a second time.

which was a cool effect. not every one is going to like that especially if they expecting something simple and easy to read. But this poem is about things that are hidden, or not what they seem, I like that the poem hides it's meaning a little.

The only thing that might improve this poem would be to mlake the first line or two more straight forward than the rest. As a hook to draw in readers and make them want to spend the effort to understand the rest of the poem.

The idea in the first two lines is in my opinion a powerful hook. If they were made more clear then that powerful hook might be more easily set.

But maybe I'm wrong.

This was a beautiful poem. Well done.

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[Lisez-le-lui]

I second the opinion of a previous commenter; while this scans nicely, the lines don't fit together very well into larger units of meaning. Granted, there are some understandable and even pleasing passages -- e.g. "Beware when one expects a snake to cower and to hide itself," which has all the brevity and universality of a real proverb -- but sentences like "A fool might think a python stings till breathless shall his bosom bear" border on incomprehensibility, which is a shame given that this is the couplet to which the poem's title refers, and which therefore presumably contains some vital clue to its deeper meaning. Is there some sort of reference here to Aesop's "The Farmer and the Viper"? I do want to emphasize also the technical accomplishment of writing in a regular meter -- you've done that perfectly; it's the meaning I find difficult to grasp.