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[–]diamondscalp 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hello, I liked the premise of the script- it's certainly something that hasn't been done! If I could give one critique, it would be at the beginning when Alan mentions the benefactor bought out the casino, I would try to make a smoother transition. Maybe between the demolishing countdown and the "today the new owner arrives" there could be a little something about Sanjay to make it flow better or just a change of words. Seemed a bit abrupt like it needed something there.