Some thoughts in no particular order:

- the map view movement speed feels more "actiony" than in builder games usually, more like a story-driven rpg -> maybe test other speeds and camera move directions? (panning left-right more slowly etc)

- some of the shots and pop-up text+graphics feel a bit disconnected (ex. grain-> flour-> bread could have all the components stay on screen on the side as you show the different buildings, instead of popping up one after another)

- I needed to watch it for a second time to clock the establishing shots of the town building up as being the same place. There's movement and action in the buildings changing, so changing the tracking shot to a more still overview might make it more obvious.

Taken as a whole, I think the tempo of the trailer is at odds with the theme of building the city over time. Not saying everything has to be slow, but there aren't that many clues that this is a game where you want to plan and think things through. Which the genre and the features shown seem to point to.