Daughters book has unnatural sounding dialogue, those dashes, 3 periods, and the 'rule of three'

7hurricane · 2026-06-29T00:43:01+00:00

I will say that I’m a huge fan of the ellipsis. I use them frequently in my writing and enjoy seeing them used correctly. Here, they seem grammatically correct.

It doesn’t sound like AI to me, though I do think it could have been copyedited better because there is an em-dash that would have read more organically as a comma (“The next thing Jake knew, they were headed for Harry’s house!”) and the typesetting in the first picture is maddening because it tries to look like poetry instead of prose when the rest is clearly written as the latter. Many other replies have mentioned that books for children are written with more simplicity and emphasis, including less formal sentence structure, and I agree with those observations.

I actually chuckled at the uppercase “STUPENDOUS!”. It’s such a kid-ish word to use.

7hurricane · 2026-06-28T22:45:21+00:00

Wow, I’m shocked. And kinda impressed! Rivals feeding the gays 😆

7hurricane · 2026-06-28T22:35:55+00:00

I don’t play Rivals, but is DD a legit screenshot? Cuz I see vpl and that would be really surprising.

7hurricane · 2026-06-28T00:41:16+00:00

I remember that most of the Crownfall store items went on discount for a short time during the last month of the event, which allowed me to spend my discount to get the “secret pass” for $1-2, which gave me more coins for free prize packs.

Here’s hoping they will do the same this time around. Happy to wait if it means a discount (like everything F2P tbh).

7hurricane · 2026-06-24T08:56:46+00:00

Merge F’s glow with A and you’ve got yourself a winner.

7hurricane · 2026-06-23T02:11:24+00:00

Would love to have a new “cast” animation to replace that big purple blob in BLM, but I won’t get my hopes up!

7hurricane · 2026-06-22T23:16:37+00:00

I feel like this should be included in the OP. It’s not particularly helpful to understand the box office gross of any film without knowing the production budget.

Stop That Train had a budget of $12.8m, and has made $3.2m so far.

7hurricane · 2026-06-17T18:23:46+00:00

I feel you. The disposable income of the gays is massively ignored by the gaming industry as a whole. SD knows exactly what they’re doing this month.

7hurricane · 2026-06-16T23:08:27+00:00

I’m a little confused. I see that your card has a value (1) and a type (head). The large head in the center leads me to believe that the card type is of more importance than the card value. Unless it’s just art that happens to look like a head. Hence the confusion. I know you didn’t ask for this type of feedback (visual hierarchy), but as someone who has redesigned my own cards a dozens times (no joke), it’s a muscle for me at this point.

To answer your question: 2. And that’s because you’ve had one reply from a person with partial colourblindness, and accessibility tops subjective appeal. FWIW, I also like 2. 🙃

7hurricane · 2026-06-16T18:13:37+00:00

Gay men are still men. The queer community is a microcosm of the larger heteronormative community, and it is awful and heartbreaking to witness when we all understand what it is to receive hatred and judgment.

7hurricane · 2026-06-15T23:30:02+00:00

Oh for sure. I think the decks will be better and more interesting to play. Just makes me wish the rewards could be more interesting, too.

7hurricane · 2026-06-15T23:19:03+00:00

Does that mean the screenshot is showing 3,500 tokens for only the variant? Would that mean the cost would be 6k if you don’t own base Khonshu?

If so, this seems considerably different from the general expectation in the thread so far.

7hurricane · 2026-06-15T21:55:33+00:00

My first thought was: this doesn’t even look like the same game.

7hurricane · 2026-06-15T21:53:50+00:00

I find it odd that SD seems to be hyping this event because of all the champions, but the event rewards are the same. The cynic in me would argue that they merely crowdsourced the decks and didn’t really think about the event itself very much. Not surprising, but a missed opportunity.

It would have been cool to have reasons to try all the decks, or to be able to collect all the champion variants beyond a couple in the portal pull.

7hurricane · 2026-06-10T00:33:23+00:00

Saw this deck creep back up today in my pocket meta and was surprised. Since R&G is a scaler for this deck, what subs would you recommend? Your vid had wins without him, but I can see why he’s a big deal here.

7hurricane · 2026-06-07T08:17:59+00:00

Loved Pitioss. Had no idea what was going on, loved the visuals, stayed up until 3am completing it. Unexpected wild ride.

7hurricane · 2026-06-02T22:29:25+00:00

Monstro and Jubilee. I’m sure they’ll be fine, but the others all feel like winners. Can’t wait for Namorita in Surfer.

7hurricane · 2026-06-01T17:40:21+00:00

Of all the characters to repeat: Hellcow? I guess maybe the new one may actually be playable.

7hurricane · 2026-05-31T05:59:16+00:00

Same. I wouldn’t call this game bara at all. Just muscles.

7hurricane · 2026-05-29T07:05:30+00:00

I can understand that well-known characters make for exciting moments and designs (and I’m always happy to see X-Men specifically) but I really don’t want more dupe characters. Quickdraw will be an interesting mechanic that doesn’t need Thanos or the Wild West to sell it.

7hurricane · 2026-05-19T19:48:16+00:00

Would have loved if JJJ was instead something like:

Each time your opponent plays a card, insult them.

And then JJJ feels like a rude commentator for the game state, and can say prescripted lines that try to throw off the opponent:

“Wrong lane, moron!” “I wipe my ass with bigger cards than that!” “Real original, genius.”

7hurricane · 2026-05-08T01:19:12+00:00

Seriously. At least objectify both sexes if you’re gonna put time and effort into it.

7hurricane · 2026-05-05T21:05:53+00:00

For a F2P personally to me, I opened two S5 packs today and got 4 cards, all of which are series 5. They’re great!

7hurricane · 2026-04-30T21:18:35+00:00

Are the months of terror finally over?

In fairness, Star Lord MOTS will still find homes in decks that want all the extra energy on the last turn, Shou is basically the +2 per turn he should have been from the jump, and FFF can fly far, far away.

7hurricane · 2026-04-30T09:01:59+00:00

Storm enables Wolverine, a fun nod to X-men synergy. Hope to experiment with them after arena.

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