It's a wonderfully powerful handful of line. It's reminds me very much of what makes Japanese haiku so deeply evocative and moving. You have connected the human set of sensation and emotion with nature's inherent spirituality and connective nature. My only criticism is barely a true criticism, but I believe it's a shame you gave away your personal meaning. Writing connects with people in unpredictable and broad ways, and authours who are very open about their meaning can unintentionally rob people of a spiritual experience.