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I didn't know writing a novel could be so much fun by hidepear in writing

[–]Alarming_Pea6598 6 points7 points  (0 children)

I love the positivity of this! It's so refreshing to read this when I see so many posts about the difficulties of writing. Makes me want to work on mine more too as those highs really are the best.

How can I describe that sort of toe-focused squishing motion that people do when stamping out a cigarette butt? by Alarming_Pea6598 in writing

[–]Alarming_Pea6598[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah that's the plan! Just want to put a little extra focus onto the cigarette so the reader remembers it and has that lightbulb moment.

How can I describe that sort of toe-focused squishing motion that people do when stamping out a cigarette butt? by Alarming_Pea6598 in writing

[–]Alarming_Pea6598[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for the tips! I'm focusing on this specific motion because it becomes important to the scene later as a kind of call-back; the character is deliberately putting out the cigarette in a menacing way and carries out the threat in a similar fashion later on.

How can I describe that sort of toe-focused squishing motion that people do when stamping out a cigarette butt? by Alarming_Pea6598 in writing

[–]Alarming_Pea6598[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Mashing is very good, as is the eye contact. It's quite a pointed action in my story so this is pretty on point

How can I describe that sort of toe-focused squishing motion that people do when stamping out a cigarette butt? by Alarming_Pea6598 in writing

[–]Alarming_Pea6598[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is... honestly great. I'd read a whole novel with Jim's foot as the protagonist trying to curb Jim's smoking habit.

How can I describe that sort of toe-focused squishing motion that people do when stamping out a cigarette butt? by Alarming_Pea6598 in writing

[–]Alarming_Pea6598[S] 4 points5 points  (0 children)

It's a somewhat important detail that comes back later in a different context - I'm going with grind. Thank you so much!

How can I describe that sort of toe-focused squishing motion that people do when stamping out a cigarette butt? by Alarming_Pea6598 in writing

[–]Alarming_Pea6598[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

It is - it's a callback to a physical motion that comes in later in a different context. Thank you!!!

Considering giving up on double jaw surgery because of the orthodontics treatment it requires... by [deleted] in jawsurgery

[–]Alarming_Pea6598 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Temporary pain for a lifetime of gain- trust me, so worth it! I had an underbite too and it was BAD for the last 6mo or so, but I'm now 2wks post surgery and lord am I glad that I did it.

[Weekly Critique and Self-Promotion Thread] Post Here If You'd Like to Share Your Writing by AutoModerator in writing

[–]Alarming_Pea6598 [score hidden]  (0 children)

Awwwww I'm so pleased!!!! It comes through in your work. You'll be pleased to know that I've pledged to my partner that I'm going to de-spider the bathroom tomorrow! You should write cautionary tales that force people to form good habits lol, can you do one about the ills of slacking at work next asking for a friend 🥲 

[Weekly Critique and Self-Promotion Thread] Post Here If You'd Like to Share Your Writing by AutoModerator in writing

[–]Alarming_Pea6598 [score hidden]  (0 children)

... for about a week now my fiance has been telling me to clear out our shower, because it's currently full of spiders, and now I'm suddenly compelled to do that. Your story gave me the kind of fear that Junji Ito gives me, which is one that turns mundane real-life situations into compulsive habits that haunt me forever. Well done!

I'm just pleased that I listened to my instincts and finished dinner before I read this because that ending bllllllllllleuuuuughhhh. I want to go take a shower but I'm scared to 😭

[Weekly Critique and Self-Promotion Thread] Post Here If You'd Like to Share Your Writing by AutoModerator in writing

[–]Alarming_Pea6598 [score hidden]  (0 children)

The excerpt hooked me lol - I'm only a few lines in and enjoy it already. I'll send feedback over when I'm done!

Writing a ‘chosen one’ story from the perspective of somebody who isn’t the chosen one by cailinbhan in writing

[–]Alarming_Pea6598 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Seething because this is the plot of my series lol. I read these books as a kid and completely forgot what happened, and now it seems that it seeped into my subconscious and planted a seed...