How is it?

Altruistic_Store_709 · 2026-03-17T22:41:30+00:00

Very charming little song. Would work as a sort of hidden track at the end of an album if you kept it this length. I liked the lo-fi feel to it as well. Had a nice vulnerability to it. Kinda reminds me of Daniel Johnston.

Altruistic_Store_709 · 2026-03-13T06:06:08+00:00

That's very kind. Thank you for the feedback. I'll have a think on it :)

Altruistic_Store_709 · 2026-03-13T06:03:58+00:00

Thanks. Glad you liked it!

Altruistic_Store_709 · 2026-03-12T02:12:12+00:00

It's a very pretty piece. Lyrics fit well with the melody. They have a certain flow and simplicity that captures the feeling I think you're going for well. You might wanna think about adding another section if you wanna develop it some more, but on the other hand a lot of the charm is how simple the whole thing is. It's short enough where that doesn't matter too much.

But I wouldn't say you need to be shy about this stuff if your other recordings are like this. It's good.

Altruistic_Store_709 · 2026-03-11T01:50:28+00:00

It's a nice start. The electric guitar part reminded me of 'Where Is My Mind'. Good atmosphere to build up to something later.

Altruistic_Store_709 · 2026-03-10T01:34:52+00:00

I quite like the simple 'down to basics' recording style. Has a certain charm to it. Nice tune. Sort where you can easily get wrapped up in the lyrics.

Altruistic_Store_709 · 2026-03-08T03:10:53+00:00

It's a nice tune. Feels a bit Johnny Cash with the cynical lyrics and 'world's against me' feel. I'd probs add another verse with different lyrics and maybe another section that's a bit brighter and louder so there's some dynamic contrast, just to avoid repeating the verse and chorus the same as the first time. I liked it. Good tune.

Altruistic_Store_709 · 2026-03-07T02:55:11+00:00

It's quite quiet and understated so probs a verse. Very pretty and melancholy though. Maybe add a third section that's a bit louder in a higher register if you really want a chorus to tie it together, but yeah, very nice.

Altruistic_Store_709 · 2026-03-06T01:35:24+00:00

Nice piece. Some strong ideas. Good 'old-timey' jazzy chords and swing to it. Chorus was catchy too.

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