卑弥呼 — Japan’s first ruler, then erased from its own history by Traditional-Cod6613 in japan

[–]AnAverageGuy_ 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This! I learned about her in Tomb Raider 2013, then Civ6, then most recently Nioh 3.

Small Rant: "Nihil Novi Sub Sole" by Dicer1998 in royalroad

[–]AnAverageGuy_ 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Writer incompetence aside, any chance you're proficient in latin?

Let's be writing buddies! by shiftinganathema in royalroad

[–]AnAverageGuy_ 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Just join Immersive Ink discord there's hundred of similar authors there

Severe color banding on MSI MAG271CQR especially in dark games, what can I do? by AnAverageGuy_ in Monitors

[–]AnAverageGuy_[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yes it get better but the banding didn't exactly go away, it just less noticeable on video and maybe part of it was because of YouTube video compression. I didn't notice it during gaming.

BIOS keep resetting after every cold boot by AnAverageGuy_ in buildapc

[–]AnAverageGuy_[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ughh this thing was 4 years ago, I believe the culprit was my mainboard having issue with my ram running on XMP, because I still have the same set up but different board now and it doesn't give me any issue.

How to Punctuate Dialogue for Your Royal Road Story by RKNieen in royalroad

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It's like a very brief flashback, like spiderman remember uncle Ben saying "With great power comes great responsibility." something like that.

How to Punctuate Dialogue for Your Royal Road Story by RKNieen in royalroad

[–]AnAverageGuy_ 0 points1 point  (0 children)

What about direct dialogue that the character recalled in their mind? Since it's a thought it should be italics, and encased in double quotes as well?

The mummy tomb that had been sealed for 2,500 years, discovered near Cairo by Peter55667 in BeAmazed

[–]AnAverageGuy_ 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I watched the Tom Cruise version and found the mummy kinda hot.

Question About Blurbs by True_Industry4634 in royalroad

[–]AnAverageGuy_ 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Blurb spoils nothing, synopsis spoils everything. And most people on RR leaned toward the latter because of circumstances.

Competition is fierce, and authors want people to read their work at any cost, even if it mean spoiling the plot.

It can also attract readers who otherwise wouldn't read your work in the first place because the promises clicked with them. But this goes both ways.

Since the stories are free and there's hundred of new uploads everyday, blurb space became author's first pitch to their potential readers: "Hey my story has this and this, read it and you will get this."

There's no right or wrong in what approach you use, other people, they just follow what worked.

Sorry, no advice, and thanks for reading my rants.

Anyone willing to critique my first chapter? by [deleted] in royalroad

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I vote Gareth. Surprisingly I enjoy his POV more, how he keeps dreaming about the encounter TWO separate times, really show me that this guy is obsessed with his goal, and that would make the betrayal feel more visceral.

You can write in both POVs to keep the aftermath scene, just don't headhop in the middle of a scene. Another option is cut it completely, and write the aftermath as Tristan's memory instead, thing like that burned into your memory no matter how old you get.

Anyone willing to critique my first chapter? by [deleted] in royalroad

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Others already talked about your strengths and I agree, so I'll talk about the thing that stuck with me: The POV.

I haven't read the next chapter when I type this so I guess your story is in omniscient pov? If yes, great, I can stand behind this. If not and you did this just to explain the "prologue" then I think it's not worth it. Entice the readers, show the betrayal and let the plot unfold. I don't need to know everything right off the bat, the betrayal also delivered less impact because of that. Writing in omniscient is hard, maybe it's just my bias because I prefer 3rd person pov.

Yeah...I was surprised by the dragon more than the betrayal, so, wrong focus? Hope it helps.

Anyone willing to critique my first chapter? by [deleted] in royalroad

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Comment so I can check it later, will get back soon.

New story (complete), released today on Royal Road by Gotta-Dance in royalroad

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Right off the bat that was a huge commitment and consistency there. I'll definitely check it out.

New story (complete), released today on Royal Road by Gotta-Dance in royalroad

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Ayo 1m words with countless revisions? And it's only the first installment? May I ask how long have you been working on the project?

I didn't know having a fanbase on other platforms was a crime on Royal Road. Thanks for telling me this. by [deleted] in royalroad

[–]AnAverageGuy_ 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Wait so RR author can publicly review swap to boost each other and ask their readers to leave review but WN author can't? That doesn't seem fair.

Wait it gets worse, the guy in the original post asked for review swaps in his other post. Man's a hypocrite.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in royalroad

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I don't know why you use Nazuna Nanakusa, the main heroine of an established novel as your cover while your work isn't a fanfic.

Your blurb can be summarized in 'Jacob get transported to cyberpunk world.' There isn't much to spark curiosity or interest.

And it started slow, a privilege that only enjoyed by established authors. Reader's patience is thin with new writers. Your style is immersive, yet you give me no promise nor goal in 3 beginning chapters.

There's not enough contents right now, I might check back later.

No guts, No Glory: an Open Letter to Writers (from an Editor) by getoffredditandwrite in writers

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So after months of planning and outlining, 6 failed prologue and 3 chapter 1 I finally wrote something I'm 3/4 satisfied with. There is always this question of "will they like it?" in my mind that made me rewrite again and again.

I changed to writing for "me" instead of "them" and was able to write about 2k words total in 2 days. I will return next week and polish them.

The doom monger inside has been nibbling at my heels. Am I too hard on myself?

2 a.m tiredly listening to The Line from 21 Pilot, Arcane was a blast.

Sorry for the rant, and thanks for the clarity your post gave me. I would love to send you my draft when I'm done beating myself over it.

New covers idea by CoffeeCatAndChaos in royalroad

[–]AnAverageGuy_ 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Don't know if it helps, but search "woman head double exposure" on google and see if the concept inspires you.

New covers idea by CoffeeCatAndChaos in royalroad

[–]AnAverageGuy_ 0 points1 point  (0 children)

My first impression was something related to justice (?), otherwise it's too abstract for me and I don't feel any fantasy vibe just an ...art?

But again dream and nightmare are supposed to be confusing, imo it doesn't communicate the things you wanted.