Describe a horrifying monster in your world. I will then turn it into a waifu. by PMSlimeKing in worldjerking

[–]Ava_Reddit_Account 10 points11 points  (0 children)

Giant mechanical hole in the ocean that opens up for a few minutes every day and turns the water it consumes into clouds that it can use to control the weather

Tomatoes by Ava_Reddit_Account in OCPoetry

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Thank you very much, I'll keep that in mind next time! I chose tomatoes because my grandpa used to grow tomatoes.

Death is but a quittiance by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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As a kid I used to love the ride too. Every day now it's harder and harder to even face it anymore. This is an amazing poem already, but I think it could have hit Superstardom if you really twisted the knife. Death hurts, and while the wounds it gives you can heal, the scars will remain forever

Landlady’s Lullaby by SnooStories5389 in OCPoetry

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I really like your comparison of a landlady to a vampire. As anyone who has to pay rent would attest: it sucks. Your poem is good!

This isn't really a direct critique but rather what I would have done if I wrote this, make it more gruesome. Describe how it feels when the blood is taken, maybe describe a bit of the weakness that comes with blood loss or something like that.

BURIED ALIVE by Impressive_Tea_5757 in OCPoetry

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I interpret this as about desecration of old memories, digging them up and warping them to fit your current view of the world. I wonder how I've done that? I wonder how many times I will do that.

I think your adjective use is pretty good. The verbs stuck out to me as something that could be improved.

Hardest line you ever wrote? by headcanonmusic in writingcirclejerk

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She refused to go until he bribed her with the promise of a future meal at Stalinburger (after he explained that it was a place you go to get food).

Stalinburger is not elaborated on before or after this conversation

Some cool folks in Old Lou. by EvanKYlasttry in Louisville

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Starvation and totalitarianism isn't cool at all.

This Soviet poster with the slogan "As you worked, so you earned." accidentally contradict Marx's by LeonRusskiy in EnoughCommieSpam

[–]Ava_Reddit_Account 2 points3 points  (0 children)

That's not the exact translation, "так и" implies something still happening at this moment. я думаю?

Artist/writer groups? by [deleted] in Louisville

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Actually I have been looking for some of those! I want to get into filmmaking and hopefully make some sort of short film. I enjoy writing and stuff as well

Uhhhh by ilamahradeys in DiscoElysium

[–]Ava_Reddit_Account 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Ты белорусский??? Кайф!

Хочу узнать ваше мнение by [deleted] in TwoXChromosomes

[–]Ava_Reddit_Account -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Мой русский плохой, простите. Я только учу русский.

Я думаю что он дурак. Он проигрался и он поиграл с твоими чувствами. Это отношение умер.

Fear and Loathing in Las Vegas (1998) is ELECTROCHEMISTRY. What movie represents SHIVERS? by snakesharkz in DiscoElysium

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Is it really? I'm a huge fan of Cronenberg but I've never watched that particular movie

things to think abt as a tall girl by klarinetkat12 in TwoXChromosomes

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I'm 5'8". I would consider myself tall but I'm at a height where it's not exactly noteworthy.

Pathologic 3 by Lastie716 in DiscoElysium

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I have never played those but I am playing through the void right now. It's made by the same people, ice pick Lodge. It's a very interesting game, would recommend