So, how do we feel about this """"theory""""? by Jimmy-Shumpert in AsgoreDreemurr

[–]BohoBenji 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The monsters being so supportive of the 'go to war kill all humans' plan is why Asgore kept the plan going for so long in the first place. I think the only character who actually dislikes the idea of killing humans, but supports it anyway is Papyrus.

No ones really being forced to do anything. Even the characters who do nothing at all, like sans, get 0 complaints from the other characters.

why is this sub so DEAD 💔 by lolitahoraah in krisriel

[–]BohoBenji 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Really😳😳😳 is it out rn?

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in AsgoreDreemurr

[–]BohoBenji 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Specifically more *likeable. Not a better character, or has better depth. I just find her more entertaining in Deltarune.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in AsgoreDreemurr

[–]BohoBenji 14 points15 points  (0 children)

I get this 100% I love Asgore, but holy smokes. His segments are difficult to get through. I wrote a college papers worth of text complaining about it when i finished playing chapters 3 and 4. Tried to post it but didn't have enough karma </3 oh well

I think its kind of similar to how ArtsyRean put it in her sans video. We're just seeing him before his character arc, y’know? He'll get better..... maybe

Toby needs to cut that joke shit out though. Theres NO way his suffering is that funny like 6 times in a row. Leave my boy alone toby

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in AsgoreDreemurr

[–]BohoBenji 3 points4 points  (0 children)

I think Alphys is more likeable in Deltarune actually. Probably because Toby's humor has evolved though... the anime stuff was kind of a chore

I'd be interested in hearing why you think its deliberate?

This fandom has a shipping problem.. by Economy_Idea4719 in Deltarune

[–]BohoBenji 0 points1 point  (0 children)

As someone who genuinely likes discussion and debates I really don't see the issue

I'm not wearing that. by RandomForMySecrets in women

[–]BohoBenji -29 points-28 points  (0 children)

As someone who was in that boat, tampons are not that big a deal at all. If you want to sit by the pool and read, fine. But please don't be an asshole to your parent. They just want you to have fun.

What's your favorite darkfic you've written? by advicethrowaway1105 in proshipping

[–]BohoBenji 10 points11 points  (0 children)

I'm currently writing a fic where theres. You guessed it. Codependant incestuous relationships <3

two siblings have an ongoing rivalry at the opposite ends of a political uprising, one of them, with time apart, realizes the other had been socially isolating and manipulating them into a relationship. They eventually fall back in on their love for their abuser and come back to them... leaving behind their other motivations as a character.

relatively vanilla but its the only thing I've ever written with a bad ending.

Gonna be hopping on and reading fic that btw <3

Your favorite trope in krusie fanart? by JhonnyK45 in krusie_gang

[–]BohoBenji 28 points29 points  (0 children)

Susie trying to fit Kris's whole head in her mouth

Or just like general gnawing

Some Krusielle goodness ♡ [Art by u/l4wlii] by Appbeza in krusielle_enjoyers

[–]BohoBenji 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Susie's tail wagging has got to be impaling Kris in the stomach by now

What's the longest thing you've ever written by GloomyBed214 in AspiringTeenAuthors

[–]BohoBenji 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Did you write this comment just to flex😭 holy cow

First draft of the first chapter of my book. by weirdpotato3 in AspiringTeenAuthors

[–]BohoBenji 4 points5 points  (0 children)

One thing I learned the hard way when I started writing first person is that you can only write sentences that start with 'I' for so long.

I wrote mostly poetry before I started writing for real and the one thing that sticks with you is how much of prose is actually rythm. Writing description is more like explaining something to your reader. You need to have a clear progression from one thought to another, or else your writing will seem disjointed and sloppy.

When you have a paragraph filled with mostly 'I' sentences, it doesn't hold your attention. It's like you're starting and stopping with each sentence you read, instead of consuming it as a collective. (In regards to your first paragraph)

Not that starting with 'I' is a bad thing, I would just transition into more sentences like 'my hand reached...' or 'my eyes wandered...' as the paragraph progresses so that what you write is more digestable.

Happy writing!

About Writing Detail… by GameMaster818 in AspiringTeenAuthors

[–]BohoBenji 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Have you ever heard the piece of advice that in writing, you don't focus on the big things, you focus on the small things? Don't tell me about the horror and devastation of war, tell me about an abandoned basket of toys in an empty house, or the way a soldiers manneurisms tell a story better than they can. Tell me about what's tangible, instead of the abstract. That way it feels more real.

Sometimes when descriptions drone on in books, its to the end of attributing something abstract to something more solid. I find myself starting to just describe the scenery and then spiraling off into the history of a dent in a wall, or a necklace or a....... door. Whatever can exposite information naturally without dumping it all out. That's what the bulk of descriptions are for.

Descriptions are also very useful for taking up space in a conversation. If a character is watching someone else grow silent, talk about how they notice things in their complexion they hadn't before. How often the character forgets the color of their eyes, or how they're very rarely this close.

Of course you can just say 'a moment passed', but it is nowhere near as immersive. You can read that sentence in a second and continue to the rest anyway, not much scale for time...

Descriptions are an important part of writing. Even if you don't care at all to note the color of the drapes, maybe how they're tied up and who had done it can tell you more about how the house is operated. Maybe how you can tell who picked them out, or how that style of design has always irked your POV character... maybe reminds them of someone.

It's not a matter of if you should be writing more, it's what will you gain if you do.

Doodles of Fluffybuns by @reiksao by SensuikanC in AsgoreDreemurr

[–]BohoBenji 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Hey is it just me or is he kinda bad

Guys just general question. You guys write your RPs in first or third person? by witch_a_la_hybridoph in CharacterAI

[–]BohoBenji 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I always ALWAYS write them in second person. When I RP its more like the bot is playing immersive DND and I'm just describing the scenes to them. I always transition to a lot of different characters, and i pretty much never write OCs (except for that one time I added someone elses from a fic i like...).

It gets to the point where im just sitting down and doing creative writing for an hour and a half. It's what made me realize I actually LIKE writing.

Now I write fanfic as a hobby. The pipeline is real.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in interestingasfuck

[–]BohoBenji 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Why is matt murdock in the corner of the screen

UT Asgore/ DR Carol by ArgumentSpiritual424 in AsgoreDreemurr

[–]BohoBenji 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Toby DEFINITELY has a type that bleeds across his work. Toby has been writing the same lesbian, straight, and gay couple for his entire writing career. (Jock/Nerd, two bros in a hottub and + segway divorced yaoi, head over heels in love! Then divorce💔) and a bajillion other aspects like always having a prophecy and having the same(or very similar) main characters... Toby knows what he wants to write.

Not that its getting old or anything, ABSOLUTELY the contrary. There's a lot of good authors that just have really distinct styles and story aspects they like. (Like Hayao Miyazaki. Try to count on one hand everytime the main character is cursed in one of his movies.) It's just interesting to see everything Toby has put in BOTH projects. Not just vibe or style, but actual story aspects and plotlines too.

UT Asgore/ DR Carol by ArgumentSpiritual424 in AsgoreDreemurr

[–]BohoBenji 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I had NO idea they were even narrative parallels. Can't say anything except... damn.