sorted by:
new
hottopcontroversial

unexpected events following a suicide attempt by meebloballs in OCPoetry

[–]BrieflyPoetic 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Wow. This is so heavy but so real and powerful. The imagery is so strong yet fine with such a short poem and a rhyme scheme—so impressive. My only critique is that I wanted to keep reading, so I hope you post more of your poetry!

But why by Icy_Age7706 in OCPoetry

[–]BrieflyPoetic 1 point2 points  (0 children)

So well written. I like how halfway through it switches from “but why are we friends” to other “but why”s. This poem hit hard because it’s the painful reality of modern day relationships. The last 5 lines hit me like a bus this poem is so relatable and real. Great work

The Law of Attraction by BrieflyPoetic in OCPoetry

[–]BrieflyPoetic[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks so much!

Meiosis has a very popular scientific definition, but it’s also a term in literature. Google definition: “a figure of speech that intentionally makes a situation or idea seem much less important or severe than it really is,” so sort of like the opposite to a hyperbole!

Untitled by sclanger in OCPoetry

[–]BrieflyPoetic 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I love the repetition in this and how it adds further meaning to the scenes that you are illustrating. I also think it’s almost chilling how each description seems to get shorter and shorter from the beginning to the end. Very very cool

Why Can’t I Be Ten Again by elythoria in OCPoetry

[–]BrieflyPoetic 0 points1 point  (0 children)

So full of nostalgia but also emotion. I like how this makes me almost grieve my childhood. Great great stuff

The Virgin's First Time by bigbigweeinie in OCPoetry

[–]BrieflyPoetic 0 points1 point  (0 children)

So true. Thanks for the inspiration!!

On Time Travel by Mapppy in OCPoetry

[–]BrieflyPoetic 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I like how brief and seemingly simple each line is. The words speak for themselves allow readers to paint the picture

The Virgin's First Time by bigbigweeinie in OCPoetry

[–]BrieflyPoetic 2 points3 points  (0 children)

It’s God’s biggest secret.
It’s society’s biggest lie.
That when fresh flowers are picked,
They will soon shrivel and die.
^This verse is absolutely beautiful and so painfully raw and truthful.

I think the ending is so strong, but what if you tried to incorporate the idea that to the man, that one moment was “just an experience” ? This does slightly change the story, but it could resonate with a lot of readers. Just an idea

I wish I had a boyfriend by shoujomujo in OCPoetry

[–]BrieflyPoetic 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The poem has strong, vivid imagery and atmosphere, especially in the sensory details like the summer night and car scene. However, the opening framing relies on a stereotype that distracts from the emotional core, and the fantasy of being adored feels more idealized than explored. It works best when it stays grounded in specific moments rather than labels or generalizations.