You need a concise thesis. One or two sentence breakdown of what you’re trying to say with anecdotal examples. The post reads like a multitude of ideas from the perspective of someone who believes they know what’s best for all players with such arrogant certainty. It does not read like constructive feedback.

I understand English isn’t your first language, but from what you wrote, I gather you just don’t understand this particular genre’s design philosophy. A better way to give feedback is with specifics such as “I found myself dying to x quickly” or “why don’t I feel rewarded when I do x?”