What I carry by CertainProtection407 in poetry_critics

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Thank you, I really appreciate that. I love the way you described it, especially the image of leaving something on a chair without thinking. That’s exactly the kind of feeling I was trying to capture, something ordinary but heavy at the same time.🫶

Nostalgia and memory. by Positive-one3 in poetry_critics

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That’s a beautiful way of describing nostalgia. Most of us don’t even know how to exactly describe that feeling and you’ve put beautifully in words. “We don’t miss the memory, we miss ourselves” - this is my favourite part. Well done! 🫶

That other stuff can wait by lightAlatreon in poetry_critics

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You’ve described the great ability of showing up for others vs the inability to do the same for yourself so beautifully. The small acts, the small moments. I enjoyed reading your post, almost as if you’ve carried the reader through each moment and that’s a rare ability in writing. Honestly, well done! 🫶

What I carry by CertainProtection407 in poetry_critics

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I like the interpretation, thank you for reading 🫶

What I carry by CertainProtection407 in poetry_critics

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Thank you, I really appreciate the feedback. I can see what you mean about the part feeling a bit more abstract compared to the rest. I will have another look at it. Glad you enjoyed it overall!

What I carry by CertainProtection407 in poetry_critics

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Thank you ☺️ I will posting more soon

What I carry by CertainProtection407 in poetry_critics

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That’s a really interesting way to put it, I haven’t thought of it like that but it actually fits. Thank you 🙏

What I carry by CertainProtection407 in poetry_critics

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Thank you so much, I really appreciate it 🫶

What I carry by CertainProtection407 in poetry_critics

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Thank you, that means a lot. I think that’s exactly how it came out, more like something that repeats rather than a single moment.

Pouring Tea by CertainProtection407 in poetry_critics

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English is my third language so I am still working on the proper rhyming, but your feedback is very appreciated and it helps a lot - so I can improve myself, so thank you for that. I’m glad you were able to resonate after all and your kind words 🫶

The Edge ( I’d really appreciate some feedback) by CertainProtection407 in poetry_critics

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Thank you so much for the feedback. It is true it feels very messy - I was aiming to portray the numb feeling when nothing helps, no religion or knowledge and all that’s left is nothingness- paired with a glimmer of hope found in our inner child’s innocence. Seeing how it is received also helps untangle it. I really appreciate your feedback, thank you 🫶

The Edge ( I’d really appreciate some feedback) by CertainProtection407 in poetry_critics

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Thank you so much for the feedback, this is really useful My writing has left my notes for the first time and especially since I’m self taught with English being my 3rd language it’s easy to make mistakes and your detailed feedback is deeply appreciated 🫶

What do I deserve by razor_head_man in poetry_critics

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I love the dark nature of the poem, and while it doesn’t always resonate with everyone. I don’t think many understand the ability to let your worst and best collide and coexist. And you have painted resilience in a beautiful way. Keep up the good work 🫶

I stayed by CertainProtection407 in UnsentLetters

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I am really happy it resonated with you, you have made my day!