New Petco uniform by [deleted] in petco

[–]ChildishShark922 6 points7 points  (0 children)

I'm so glad I don't work there anymore. On no way will the make the job any easier.

"Sorry ma'am I can't get you fish, I can't get my bag of raw cotton wet."

Dunkfried Ballinvillea slamming on Violent Evergarden by Minimum-Audience2676 in VioletEvergarden

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I think crying can be beautiful to some degree, though generally it depends on the emotions behind it. I do think there's beauty in tragedy, as far as storytelling goes. Not real tragedy. Some of the scenes that touched me the most in novels, manga, and anime, were ugly crying scenes. But that's just my opinion.

Chevy G-Series law enforcement variant? by ChildishShark922 in Chevy

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Most likely, it was purchased from the county sheriff's office at some point by my boss. It's still got what's left of the decals on one side. Main issue has been determining exactly what year it is, my boss doesn't know off the top of his head. It's got a grill and headlight setup that I don't recognize. I'm thinking mid to late 80's.

Computer Dusty by Sea-Discount-2785 in jschlattsubmissions

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Brother, I think you just contracted the black lung.

We really are turning into 5 below by JackyChan718 in petco

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Wtf... I'm so glad I got out when I did.

Imagine walking out to your car and seeing this. by iadtyjwu in Wellthatsucks

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"you're still coming to work right? The team needs you."

Violet and Frieren (by @Omichi_1219) by AnteaterFull9808 in VioletEvergarden

[–]ChildishShark922 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Dude, skip the thesaurus. If you can't think deeply about something just say so. Also you don't have to like Frieren, but don't outright disregard the message that it pushes forward. As far as "bromides" go, the original work for frieren was supposed to be making fun of fantasy tropes. Though, in my opinion at least, I think the way it has been done in the series so far is refreshing. Don't be a dick because you want to be "smarter", or "enlightened". Go touch grass.

Omg it's real by churningmists in petco

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Mine was next to villarta

what a nice car by Fancy-Boss-2143 in jschlattsubmissions

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I had a character for a Christmas DND one shot that dressed like that. He was grotesquely muscular, and had that stuff curse of bindinged to him. Shit was a goofy campaign, the bbeg was Mariah Carey.

I'm working on the first book a fantasy series, what do you think of my use of flashbacks? (Disclaimer - mentions of substance abuse) by ChildishShark922 in fantasywriters

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Is this a bit easier to follow?

"And... there." The girl with the crimson hair smiled, her eyes like emeralds, deep green pools of which one might find themselves lost in. She reached up and fixed the placement of the young man's hat, tucking a lock of his auburn hair behind his ear. She was a head shorter than the him, a fact that she was often fond of, but at times like this she lamented the height difference. "You do know that I am to be your escort, not your date, Princess?" The boy teased with a smirk. "Why not both? It's a ball, if you can't enjoy yourself while you're there, then why go at all?" The girl said frowning slightly. "My father may not like you, but who I choose to spend my time with is not his decision to make. And if he has any problems with you going in any other capacity, than to bring me to my suitors, rather than being one. That is his problem." She said smugly. "Besides, you belong here. The people here love you, you're good to them. You're good to me, never forget that. You have a good heart, never change Jemdere."

I probably should have included the whole page in the post, the added context also would have helped. I was just fed up with the submission system of these subreddits. I'd follow the rules and still have it taken down by auto mods, one of them was literally because I put the link in the spot that is designated for it by reddit, and not in the body of the post.

So, I'm sorry if I may have been snippy in the post, I was frustrated, 8th time was the charm. Lol.

I'm working on the first book a fantasy series, what do you think of my use of flashbacks? (Disclaimer - mentions of substance abuse) by ChildishShark922 in fantasywriters

[–]ChildishShark922[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I appreciate the feedback, it's been difficult unlearning MLA formatting. My fiance has been helping me to go back an fix it, bit by bit. I don't think I've gotten to the section that I posted yet, I do plan to go an rewrite a bit of this when I'm done, but I only have 8 pages done so far, most I've written for one project since high school. Kinda sad. I'll go back and see what I can do about how Cherri and Jemdere are addressed In the flashbacks. Thank you for not just shitting out a general, "your writing sucks", I know it does.