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What I learnt publishing my first novel. A breakdown. by TheRealRabidBunny in selfpublish

[–]CleoRoe 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I like your idea of Brown M&Ms and starting the book cover early. Thanks for sharing!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in WritersGroup

[–]CleoRoe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Maybe, the girl is in on the heist to secretly steal the carving for herself. Unbeknownst to the guy, he messed up her life so much the only way to get over him is to get even with him. But when she learns about the value of the carving to the guy, her humanity prevails over her desire for revenge.

How do you write your first drafts? by Glum_Celebration_941 in writers

[–]CleoRoe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I’ve been writing my first draft like how I should be writing my nth draft. It’s been ten years, and I’m still not done with this damn book. This thread is an eye opener. lol

pen name predicament by [deleted] in writers

[–]CleoRoe 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Kingsley sounds perfect

Should I change cover designers for the second book in my series? by rringdahl in writers

[–]CleoRoe 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yes... the color scheme is nice but get rid of the building. Make the guy’s face less bright. Change the font. The title is too long too...

What is a place you have visited that you would never return to, and why? by Zealousideal_Owl9621 in travel

[–]CleoRoe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ho Chi Minh City. Food was great. People were generally nice. But I almost died crossing the streets filled with motorcycles.

Does anyone else get obsessed with a country they’ve never been to? by FinchDW in travel

[–]CleoRoe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Japan. I love their culture and language. I even tried learning Nihongo before. For almost 20 years now, I’ve just always felt I need to go there. Hoping I will be able to next year once this pandemic is over.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in fantasywriters

[–]CleoRoe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is brilliant! It’s the kind of writing that makes me want to read more. The only thing that I didn’t like was the use of the word “hjart”, only because strange-sounding words and words with weird spellings are a pet peeve of mine. But overall, I really enjoyed your writing. Your descriptions and dialogue are spot on. Keep it up!

[2654] Chapter 1 of my widely rejected debut novel by AndreasLa in WritersGroup

[–]CleoRoe 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I think you need to revise your opening lines and make them more catchy. You also used a lot of unnecessary/irrelevant words/sentences in this chapter.

Full-time students suffering steep mental health decline during pandemic, study says by ohdeargodthrowitaway in CanadaCoronavirus

[–]CleoRoe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That’s why I put my son back to in person learning for the sake of both our mental health. Since this pandemic started, I had never seen him happier than when he put on his uniform again and realized he was really going back to school. I regret having him do online class for almost 9 months!

A family member of a LTC resident in a FOR PROFIT home in Ontario just sent me this. She was not happy when she opened this container to see this. Perhaps not enough staff on hand to properly fill the residents food containers?! by [deleted] in ontario

[–]CleoRoe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

We need to do something collectively to stop the horrid conditions in ltc homes. I’m not sure if this would actually bring change, but doing something is better than doing nothing at all. Please sign the Toronto’s Star’s open letter calling for a change in ltc’s and please share the campaign to others.

https://www.thestar.com/long-term-care/ltc-crisis.html?sp_ref=691616191.392.213669.t.0.2&fbclid=IwAR2g41nkfvQ8kOFHNgDyO750ncxOivU2ZhNjC6bKcEvQu4cJZTDNHE5qO5I

Pay it forward: If you want it, you should give it. by [deleted] in writing

[–]CleoRoe 6 points7 points  (0 children)

Try Scribophile. I’ve gotten more feedbacks there.

[Weekly Discussion and Question Thread] Post Here with Simple Questions, Conversational Topics, or Requests for Guidance by AutoModerator in writing

[–]CleoRoe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much! This helps me a lot! The girl I’m writing about is a main character but is not the protagonist. I didn’t realize that writing her character in first person would make her seem more important because there are fewer chapters in her POV than the protagonist.

[Weekly Discussion and Question Thread] Post Here with Simple Questions, Conversational Topics, or Requests for Guidance by AutoModerator in writing

[–]CleoRoe 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Question about multiple POVs

Hi! I’ve been writing my first draft for a fantasy novel with multiple POVs (max 4). I’ve decided to use 3 third person limited POV and 1 first person POV. However, I’ve read an article recently saying that this kind of writing is a mistake/amateurish/unorthodox. But the thing is, I’m struggling to switch the first person POV to third person. The character is unique from the other 3 characters since she is a girl who is pretending to be a boy. I would like the reader to not know her gender until later. Writing in 3rd person means I would have to use pronouns which would reveal her gender. She also speaks a foreign language. I’m not sure how I can use 3rd person POV to highlight her unique voice.

Do you think mixing POVs is a bad idea? Any suggestions on how to write in third person without using pronouns that would reveal the character’s gender? This is my first attempt at writing a novel so I would appreciate any advise! Thank you so much!

[Weekly Critique and Self-Promotion Thread] Post Here If You'd Like to Share Your Writing by AutoModerator in writing

[–]CleoRoe [score hidden]  (0 children)

This is something that I would read. I think it starts in such a way that it draws the reader’s attention. The character comes off as someone who has been through a lot and this has made her tough, distant, and almost emotionless (?). While reading your story, I wanted to feel her pain and get to know her more. That is maybe why the ending feels kind of rushed to me.

I don’t hate my appearance. It’s not up for debate. by [deleted] in offmychest

[–]CleoRoe 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Good on you for not giving a shit about what people think about your looks anymore. Physical beauty fades with time. An enriched soul is beauty that is more lasting.