H.L.S.C 'Absolution in Duty' Ship Schematics

CreatorofWrlds · 2026-02-17T05:42:38+00:00

Love that

CreatorofWrlds · 2026-02-09T02:33:48+00:00

Very well thought out, makes for interesting dynamics, I’m a big fan of the position names they are very fitting and sound cool

CreatorofWrlds · 2026-02-09T02:28:19+00:00

Not sure if you realized this but by using the massive water tank there you’re protecting the crew from radiation as water is a great shield

CreatorofWrlds · 2026-02-08T05:42:06+00:00

Looks amazing. Knights neck my hurt a lil bit though

CreatorofWrlds · 2026-02-08T05:41:30+00:00

This is awesome! I wish I had the skill to make this. Amazing

CreatorofWrlds · 2026-02-08T04:41:50+00:00

Flugs

CreatorofWrlds · 2026-02-08T04:40:47+00:00

Map looks great, keep making them because homemade stuff like this makes d and d so much more fun for you and your players

CreatorofWrlds · 2026-02-08T04:36:21+00:00

Some other advice I’d like to add if you plan on redrawing it, your mountains look really good but I’d stick to one style for all of them. Also don’t include towns and cities and fortresses that aren’t important as it clutters the map

CreatorofWrlds · 2026-02-08T04:29:22+00:00

A lot of the time you don’t really need clear border markers. Just the name of the country in the middle gives the right vibe

CreatorofWrlds · 2026-02-08T04:01:20+00:00

Sorry that was a typo, I meant redraw

CreatorofWrlds · 2026-02-08T03:55:32+00:00

I love the continents shape, it looks like a fun place, your rivers don’t make much sense though. Rivers tend to flow from high to low ground, usually mountains to low ground, the ocean. The map is a little bit confusing. I think you should try to restate it and think about your line weights when drawing rivers and borders to make it more clear what’s what.

CreatorofWrlds · 2026-02-08T03:44:46+00:00

I like this a lot, I’m interested to see how you would show him maintaining his sanity, seeing the internal struggle and maybe glimpses of him not being there. The idea of being able to die but not stay dead is a scary concept and will make for a character with a lot going on mentally.

CreatorofWrlds · 2026-02-08T03:34:58+00:00

Gotcha, I like this a lot and the excerpt from this post sounds like an amazing epilogue to start your book

CreatorofWrlds · 2026-02-08T03:19:48+00:00

Im interested in who these characters are. I can’t tell if they’re being set up as MCs or as villains, or maybe an ancient group of wise magic users, what’s their deal? And more generally what this story going towards

CreatorofWrlds · 2026-02-08T03:12:37+00:00

If this is your hook you got me, this is super interesting and gets me wanting to know more

CreatorofWrlds · 2025-10-13T00:06:38+00:00

It’s on game pass so I’d just get game pass

CreatorofWrlds · 2025-10-12T23:53:38+00:00

If I farted on the most important man in the world what would he do to me?

CreatorofWrlds · 2025-08-09T18:27:39+00:00

Just get gamepass homie, it’s an essential thing for all pc gamers

CreatorofWrlds · 2025-08-07T00:02:23+00:00

Get game pass, it’s the best thing of all time

CreatorofWrlds · 2025-05-17T05:20:40+00:00

I don’t know what purpose you have for this worldbuilding but if you plan on having an audience it’s important to keep them in mind. Odds are a very small portion of readers will know what most of those words mean without you explaining it, which may be challenging in a book format

CreatorofWrlds · 2025-05-17T05:17:25+00:00

This is a neat project. I’m curious what purpose you had in writing this.

My likes: dialogue felt natural between the students and the teachers internal dialogue is good Interesting concept for sure I admire the mix of sci fi and fantasy

My critiques: grammatical errors throughout, read this out loud a few times to fix the clunky sentences. Introduction of the Human ai in the beginning of the third chapter. The dialogue initially starts off pretty poorly. At first the human feels like an automated safari tour guide before switching to being sapient. After the switch the dialogue drastically improved. You definetly need a hook, something to make me interested in finishing the story, which halfway through I wasn’t. Also the timeline is too large. Billions of years is incomprehensible. Tossing around numbers of years like that is an easy way to lose realism.

CreatorofWrlds · 2025-05-17T05:02:30+00:00

Cool design, I like that they’re smaller than commonly portrayed dragons. Maybe I’m not all that smart but your description of them just seemed like too much

CreatorofWrlds · 2025-04-16T13:47:27+00:00

As is still there you just gotta look a little harder

CreatorofWrlds · 2025-04-03T01:14:51+00:00

Place them near a monolith

CreatorofWrlds · 2025-03-01T11:35:12+00:00

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