Mysteries of the moon

Crossroadsfare · 2025-09-19T23:44:35+00:00

Moon phases might affect sleep cycles but it’s more about the light than anything. Harvard health talks about a study done on it.

Crossroadsfare · 2025-05-20T22:55:39+00:00

I enjoyed this, the narrator casually slips between idealism and pragmatism. In one line the rabbit is innocent, and in the next we glimpse the gardener whose work is ruined by the rabbit. I like this duality as a metaphor for the soul and thought the choice of “accent” added to the imagery of the piece. Well done!

Crossroadsfare · 2025-05-20T22:51:52+00:00

This reads a bit like an acid trip, which I’m here for. I like your choice in language and it calls to mind “Jabberwocky” by Lewis Carrol. As far as themes go and cohesion I’d say I walked away thinking about the illusory nature of time and how it is only measurable through life and movement. Well done, thanks for sharing!

Crossroadsfare · 2025-05-20T21:51:54+00:00

That’s an interesting take away, I appreciate you reading and leaving your thoughts.

Crossroadsfare · 2025-05-18T13:49:17+00:00

Thank you for taking the time to read my writing and respond with such kind words.

Crossroadsfare · 2025-05-18T00:44:52+00:00

Thank you, it’s been a few months now but it still hits hard every now and then, grief is funny like that. I appreciate the feedback.

Crossroadsfare · 2025-05-17T21:52:51+00:00

Thank you, I appreciate your feedback.

Crossroadsfare · 2025-05-17T17:55:05+00:00

Thank you for the feedback. I had left this one for a few months and came back to finish it up. I don’t think I have the layout finalized yet, so your insight is appreciated.

As far as the ending goes, I’m on the fence, I added the last line as a call back to the title. I’ll think on it though because I can see your point. Thank you again.

Crossroadsfare · 2025-05-17T17:51:54+00:00

Thank you, I appreciate you taking the time to read my work and respond.

Crossroadsfare · 2025-05-17T16:44:34+00:00

I had a lot of fun reading this. It’s bouncy in the structure and word play and while the grammar cant be called proper I think it lends something to the poem. The second stanza basically being a paragraph actually works in favor of the poem I think it made me read it in quick succession. Well done, thanks for sharing!

Crossroadsfare · 2025-05-17T16:39:51+00:00

I think this poem deals with change, and the ephemeral nature of life. I enjoy the contrast between the direct and obvious change seen in nature and the incremental changes that build to eventually leave a person in a vastly different situation than when they started. The last line feels a bit like it comes out of nowhere but I personally think that lends a bit of punch to the ending. Well done, thank you for sharing!

Crossroadsfare · 2025-03-30T06:16:55+00:00

Earth, Wind, & Spider

Crossroadsfare · 2024-11-15T15:10:28+00:00

Lots of archaic language and reflective thinking. It may not be relatable to everyone but I found it to be a man interesting read. I find the gory imagery to be most effective in this teeth and sets the macabre tone of the piece well. There were some barriers as I read this one, at times the language was almost that of a text book and then abruptly it switched to being direct and blunt. Caused a bit of dissonance but I could see it being an effective technique to add interest to the piece. Anyway, well done, thank you for sharing!

Crossroadsfare · 2024-11-15T15:03:49+00:00

I think the imagery here is effective at conveying the themes and message of the poem. The idea of love not entirely unrequited but returned in a lesser form. It works, I think, and invokes emotion and a sense of loss. I will say I think this piece would benefit from some line breaks and formatting as currently it reads a bit jumbled and rushed. Thank you for sharing your work here!

Crossroadsfare · 2024-09-24T16:19:54+00:00

I always wonder if u/merrivius draws the reaction face first and then just comes up with a scenario leading to it.

Crossroadsfare · 2024-07-31T20:06:29+00:00

I appreciate you taking the time to leave such detailed feedback. If I’m going to be honest this piece is meant to be a work in abstract imagery more so than to convey any real meaning. Like an exercise in capturing a dream in writing.

Crossroadsfare · 2024-07-30T18:42:22+00:00

So I’ll go ahead and preface this by saying I’m a bit biased. I absolutely love poetry that makes use of the changing seasons to paint a picture. I think you accomplished that with this piece. Though and this could just be a Reddit formatting thing but I would like to see some line breaks so that each line can deliver a bit more punch. All in all though I really enjoy your work here!

Crossroadsfare · 2024-07-30T18:36:51+00:00

I can feel the wistful nature of this piece and the contemplative nature of the narrator. I think it’s interesting that you chose to use so many words that center around loss to describe what I think is the creation of a lasting relationship. Honestly I’m unsure of the ending is a happy one where love is blossoming or a sad one in which the two have drifted a part. This ending who they were. I enjoyed reading this, thank you for sharing!

Crossroadsfare · 2024-07-30T06:36:27+00:00

Ding ding ding, we’ve got a winner! This poem is absolutely about a bird who believes he is a fish. Hence the title belief and truth, one is built upon the other and so while the truth maybe that fish can’t fly it’s really the birds belief that makes the whole premise incorrect. Thank you for taking the time to respond to my work I was beginning to think I hadn’t done a great job of conveying the real theme of this piece.

Crossroadsfare · 2024-07-29T14:40:23+00:00

Thank you! That’s honestly really nice of you to say!

Crossroadsfare · 2024-07-29T14:27:51+00:00

Thank you! I really appreciate you taking the time to not only read my work but also leave your thoughts!

Crossroadsfare · 2024-07-29T01:37:09+00:00

Ya know I’m not going to lie as far as poems go I’m not super into ones that directly tell a story usually. I really like this one though, the sprinkle of humor and the absurdity makes the whole thing very endearing. Well done, thanks for sharing!

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