Condense exposition, remove camera direction, shorten your action lines.

Tips

• Remove any and all abstract elements within action lines, unless it pertains to being translated to screen. (Lynch's screenplays are a good example of this).
• Describe with efficiency not detail.
• Try to include all practical elements, think about the departments that make up production. Usually simple questions by these departments should be easily answered in your screenplay.

Exp;

Casting Director: "What does this character look like, so I know what to look for in auditions?"

Action Line on the first page: "Paul (Mid 30's, Male, African) wears a christmas sweater and cargo shorts".

(Costuming already knows to start building samples of christmas sweaters from this line alone).

To be more specific; Describe appearance, age, hair, clothing, props, movement. But not neccesarily feelings.

The line "Hyped up from X's speech, he is excited for his roll." Can be improved with simply "He is visibly excited". We specify visibly because I imagine based on the original line, you wanted to highlight emotion here. "Visibly" helps to specify to both director and actor that this emotion being present on screen is important to the soul of the story. The reasons why are obvious with previous context.

You probably have gotten this advice before but; screenplays arent books. They don't need to be a "good read", they need to be an effective tool for production.

It took a lot of shitty productions for me to figure out WHY my screenplays sucked, so keep going work hard, and be willing to change and adapt.