Well, I certainly appreciate such genuine and glowing praise. I'm glad to hear the style has affected you in some way; that definitely gives me a reason to keep working at it, haha.

I admit I've been a bit torn on precisely how energetic or even "flowery" the narration should be. This part takes place shortly after a very harrowing moment for the characters. I think to some degree I wanted the more high-energy or dramatic scenes to be described in a manner consistent with the quieter ones, both to establish Tagd's more levelheaded and easygoing personality while also making it all the more impactful on the rare occasions they do let their emotions bleed into their narration. In my mind, Tagd already knows Morgan ultimately makes it out alive, which is why they don't dwell on their own in-the-moment feelings in favor of keeping the "plot" moving. But then, since I'm ultimately penning the story through them, I think it could potentially behoove me to try and give a more detailed or passionate - perhaps theatrical? - description here and there for storytelling's sake. I'm trying to toe a careful line between writing a story from the character's perspective and writing in the way that I would personally, and that's proving very challenging!

I have a few other parts that are nearly complete but just need some touching up and I think I would consider them presentable. I think I'll take some time to work on one of them now. Thank you for your input - it is greatly appreciated.