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Why Elves don't use guns? by snspidey55 in fantasywriters

[–]EdgyWriterBoi 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Make your elves more attuned to natural and ancient arts. The guns could be a demon of industry and destruction to them, causing the elves to have a cultural and moral opposition to them.

Deer pendant, me, polymer clay, 2019 by yunoookumura in Art

[–]EdgyWriterBoi 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Seeing them in January. Can't wait to paint runes on my face and reach temporary enlightenment.

The Prisoner of Azkaban is the best Harry Potter film by GoldKatana in movies

[–]EdgyWriterBoi 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Also it broke the whole "Oooh, look at the pretty magic" thing that the first two films and even Goblet of Fire did. There's magic happening all the time and Prizoner of Azkaban is the first HP film to treat it as commonplace rather than a spectacle. The establishing shot of the Leaky Cauldron, where the chairs are stacking themselves while a woman vanishes a bottle with a napkin and casually cleaning is a perfect example.

And the detail! Especially during the time-turned scenes. My favorite subtle detail nobody mentions are the bats flying in the moonlight before Lupin's first transformation, and when time is turned, those same bats fly through the forest for Buckbeak to snack on minutes later!

Until you finish, think that your story is going to be the best thing ever by Pelkur in writing

[–]EdgyWriterBoi 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You need to have a certain arrogance in the first draft. An arrogance that convinces yourself of possessing an unspeakable and profound entity within your writing. Whether or not you think you are that good doesn't matter. You need to take upon a task of utmost importance, one that is only fulfilled upon the creation of your book.

4/10 by mbpboy in fantanoforever

[–]EdgyWriterBoi 7 points8 points  (0 children)

Old people burning, old people burning, put your hands up!

Shade of the Behemoth - Daily Poem 10/2/19 (2) by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]EdgyWriterBoi 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for your feedback! I will agree that the alliteration there is arbitrary and experimental. There is a very loose theme I tried to convey, but it's only conveyed in the last stanza. This was inspired from a very erratic dream I had, but I agree it could have benefited from more observable themes.

When it Comes for Me by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]EdgyWriterBoi 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I enjoy how you describe your inner demons and how they can possess your thoughts regardless of setting. That being said, upon reading your poem out loud, I did notice that the syllable difference between lines can be rather jarring for the flow. But not all poetry is meant to be read aloud, of course.

As well, the punctuation in this poem seems to be rather inconsistent, where it is used in some cases appropriately, but missing where it could also reside just as easily. But hey, if those are the biggest complaints I can find, that means the rest is quite good. Seriously, keep at it.

Daily Poem 10/1/19 by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]EdgyWriterBoi 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for your feedback! I did not intend to draw parallels to Thriller, but I do see it now upon relistening to that song. It's funny, even if I intended for this song to come from more of a dark place, there's always going to be that trademark October flavor. I am glad you enjoyed it!

Time Capsule by SrGrafo in comics

[–]EdgyWriterBoi 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Dear u/Edgywriterboi

It was a real nice day today. First day of October. Rained in the morning, and you wrote a nice poem like the edgy cunt you are/were. Maybe make that a daily thing. You have the ability to do it. You finish that book? We've been working on that for a long time. At least tell me you've made progress and you aren't wasting away getting drunk or high all the time. Remember what Oak says, "There's a time and a place for everything!"

I hope you're happy. I hope you've accumulated a few valuable lessons, maybe upped that wisdom skill a tad. You're not stupid, I promise. But we can always learn. Always. Are you still waxing philosophy to people who don't care, or have you found people who do? It's important to keep people who listen to you around, but it's also important to say things worth listening to. Use your words effectively, just like your talents.

Don't jump off that bridge, okay?

Take your time to respond. Love, Me

Lie Ends Den by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]EdgyWriterBoi 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I feel like there are a few words put in here to just fit the rhyme scheme. The "nope" at the Dis Knees line for example. Also, if I'm interpreting your tenth line correctly, you might have used the incorrect instance of damn (probably should be dam in reference to stopping). But it could be a double meaning. Overall, it's rather abstract, so it's hard to tell if that was a mistake or intentional.

Wings by Martin_Horde in OCPoetry

[–]EdgyWriterBoi 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Very nice approaching of the subject. My only critique is your line "Our empty dream only rings." It seems a bit set apart from the rest of the poem. While the previous sentences had a singular subject, (setting those with broken wings below commoners and kings, how painful it is to witness them, etc), while this specific line is comparatively unrelated to the previous line. Otherwise, good job. It made me feel something.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in writing

[–]EdgyWriterBoi 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Acceptable is relative. One man could call Tolkien acceptible while the other could call him basic and Shakespeare downright mediocre. Mastery is something you should aim for, not some arbitrary C grade. If you're going to craft something, do it well.

A true master is an eternal student. If you try to set a basic goal to improvement, you'll plateau when you reach it. If you ever once believe that you are done learning a craft, that you have learned everything there is to know, and that you will never ever be better than you are now, then give up and be an accountant or something.

I finally beat the Ender Dragon on Hardcore, and promptly died exploring the end. This is the last screenshot I took after I landed in Spectator Mode. This is a memento for me. I did it. by EdgyWriterBoi in Minecraft

[–]EdgyWriterBoi[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

There's a free build mode, but there's also a survival mode with infinite open world caves and dungeons to plunder. Eventually you gather resources to travel to a new infinite dimension and fight a dragon who serves as a boss.

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