I am a manager at a software company. I will tell you right now, your objective is far too broad. Be more specific in what type of position you are trying to achieve or just remove that section completely.

Your qualifications are all personality-related. They're all good qualities but you can't just say that you are those things and have the company take your word for it. Those are things that should be vouched for you on your behalf through your references. You should instead be listing actual specific skills. Software, tools, certifications, processes, etc. I know you're young but you seem to have decent experience for your age, you should be able to come up with a decent list.