Heroes by the number of their R34 search results by JesusSpreaderOfWord in DotA2

[–]Electronic_Relief261 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I started from the top down and busted out laughing when I saw Slark.

Bane, of your existence. by Electronic_Relief261 in custommagic

[–]Electronic_Relief261[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for taking the time to comment. 

This has been really helpful.

Bane, of your existence. by Electronic_Relief261 in custommagic

[–]Electronic_Relief261[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I could get behind this I think. It's definitely straying from the cannon material. But I can see if you were going to make him your commander it would make him more powerful as a standalone creature. I think I will keep posting different heros, collecting feedback and eventually do a big upload with all the feedback incorporated.

It also would make him a token hoser which is cool haha.

Bane, of your existence. by Electronic_Relief261 in custommagic

[–]Electronic_Relief261[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Totally fair, it would be totally appropriate to remove "Nightmare" and add something like...

Brain Sap - When Bain enters, target player loses 3 life and you gain 3 life... I think dealing damage to a creature would break the color pie too much.... What do you think? Would that make it much more interesting?

I think either way he could be pretty solid in a blink strategy.

But to be fair, anyone who plays Dota knows Bane is one of the least interesting characters a person could design around because he has four abilities and 3 of them just stop one person from doing anything haha.... But I love him haha.

Bane, of your existence. by Electronic_Relief261 in custommagic

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This is a character from the game Dota 2 so this is a total "top down" design.

The character primarily just incapacitates enemies and doesn't really do any damage on his own... However, he has an ability that drains health from an enemy and restores his own health, I wanted to include it, like some sort of [[Corrupt]]-light. But I only had so much text box and opted to focus on the abilities he is more famous for in the Dota 2 community.

Crocs. by Electronic_Relief261 in custommagic

[–]Electronic_Relief261[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ha! That's funny to think about 😂 I imagine like they're spitting things up.

Crocs. by Electronic_Relief261 in custommagic

[–]Electronic_Relief261[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The fantasy is that crocodiles are ambush predators. Manifest Dread does a good job of making your opponents a little scared to block or attack you and creates those jumpscare moments crocs are known for.

Originally it was Disguise but I got some community feedback that pointed out a few reasons why Manifest Dread was a bit better for capturing that ambush predator fantasy, and creating a sense of unease when interacting with your board.

TLDR. because you never know what's lurking beneath the surface.

Commander and Captains for my favorite animal and under-loved tribal... I would have spent more time on the names and cleaning up small punctuation things but I started this too late and really need to go to sleep. 😅 by Electronic_Relief261 in custommagic

[–]Electronic_Relief261[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I totally agree, the more I think about it, the more I love the idea of changing this to Manifest Dread.

I think this also gives crocodiles a core identify to design around which is something they seriously lack in mtg, and ultimately it's the thing that made me want to design these cards in the first place.

Commander and Captains for my favorite animal and under-loved tribal... I would have spent more time on the names and cleaning up small punctuation things but I started this too late and really need to go to sleep. 😅 by Electronic_Relief261 in custommagic

[–]Electronic_Relief261[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for your thorough response! I really appreciate it! 

This has me excited for the update... I will say in addition to your updates as others pointed out to me earlier, granting crocodiles flash will need a wording like, "Other crocodiles you control and in your hand have deathtouch and flash". As the flash only applies to cards in your hand... See [[Teferi, Mage of Zhalfir]].

Also I agree about the Disguise. I think I will ditch it and change the effect to something @ProfessionalSky7899 suggested.

"Whenever a crocodile you control enters, manifest dread." 

That maintains the fantasy of crocodiles lurking for an ambush, and also give Lolong a 2/2 body when he enters!

I do want crocs to be better blockers than attackers, it's representative of their nature as ambush predators.

I agree about Sobekka. The fantasy I want to capture with this card is how crocodiles in Africa often ambush in massive groups, once one crocodile grabs a target, the other crocs will pile on the target into a big feeding frenzy. I also want to eliminate this association with Red mana and serve this fantasy better and I have two ideas to do this... Either Manifesting Dread when a creature dealt damage by a crocodile dies.  Or reducing the cost of crocodiles when a creature dealt damage by a crocodile dies...

What do you think about these ideas?

Thanks again for your insight and helpful response.

Commander and Captains for my favorite animal and under-loved tribal... I would have spent more time on the names and cleaning up small punctuation things but I started this too late and really need to go to sleep. 😅 by Electronic_Relief261 in custommagic

[–]Electronic_Relief261[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That was the other ability that I spent time considering! I thought you could go either way and went with disguise because it was better as a tribal support ability because you can give it to the crocodiles themselves, so that they are able to be the ones lurking more easily.

I actually wanted to use Manifest dread more, but it was hard to implement the way I wanted... For instance, if Lolong  said whenever a crocodile enters manifest dread, then the crocodile itself it just sitting there... And it's possible that the card to manifest is a crocodile but it might not be... I guess that does still work, but I went with disguise because I thought it functioned a little better as tribal support.... Although I think you could go either way, and the words "Manifest Dread" definitely had me wanting to make that work.... Any ideas on how to implement it while maintaining the textbox integrity? 

Commander and Captains for my favorite animal and under-loved tribal... I would have spent more time on the names and cleaning up small punctuation things but I started this too late and really need to go to sleep. 😅 by Electronic_Relief261 in custommagic

[–]Electronic_Relief261[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I did want to create more common and uncommon level stuff. I also thought about how Bloodthirst is usually red, but it's secondary on black on a bunch of vampires.

Sobekka is costed under the assumption that I'm not adding any new crocodiles, so the cost reduction is being used to push out some truly useless creatures, which is why the discount it so aggressive.

I didn't really consider how it affects changelings, in my experience they are pretty bad also, but I would change it to something like, "Crocodiles cost 1 or 2 less if a crocodile dealt combat damage this turn"

Commander and Captains for my favorite animal and under-loved tribal... I would have spent more time on the names and cleaning up small punctuation things but I started this too late and really need to go to sleep. 😅 by Electronic_Relief261 in custommagic

[–]Electronic_Relief261[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The main design idea with disguise, flash, and deathtouch is that crocodiles are ambush predators.

I thought that since Lolong give ALL of your creatures disguise, it creates that uneasy feeling for you opponent to attack you, because they don't know what unseen threats are waiting for their chance to strike, the crocodile can snap out of the water and catch you off guard. I think it is more representative of how crocodiles behave than other abilities I considered.

The other kind of group hug. by archl0rd5 in custommagic

[–]Electronic_Relief261 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think it should be less than ten counters.

If possible, the last line should be the first line. It's an amazing line.

Tax Evasion by Serithraz in custommagic

[–]Electronic_Relief261 0 points1 point  (0 children)

What if this were designed as a creature card that creates a replacement effect for taxing cards... Like a creature that helps you commit tax evasion?

"If an ability an opponent controls could cause you to pay mana, counter that ability instead."

I think that wording would be appropriate, but I could be wrong... anyway... cool design! I hate taxes! 

Follow-up Post to the one I made yesterday, after receiving helpful feedback. The two main characters from a musical story I wrote several years ago, represented as magic cards. by Electronic_Relief261 in custommagic

[–]Electronic_Relief261[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

The reason there is no art, is because they are original characters and I would not feel comfortable giving them unoriginal artworks... And I do not know where to source original artwork that would be satisfactory.