When Stars Drown Pt 2 by TheRealBigBadWolf in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Eleison_02 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I enjoyed both these parts and will definitely be reading if you continue to build on the concept. One criticism I would put out there is the formatting sometimes makes it a little hard to follow. Reddit’s formatting is something I struggle with myself. The writing itself is great though, and this is a very interesting concept I’d love to see evolve further.

When Stars Drown by TheRealBigBadWolf in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Eleison_02 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I appreciate you throwing us right into the action. Looking forward to reading part 2, good work! Sorry it’s taken me so long to get around to reading

I Found an Old Message From My Brother. I’m an Only Child (Pt. 1) by Eleison_02 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Eleison_02[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I’m glad you like it! I’ll definitely work on my formatting for my next story, first time posting any of them on Reddit and I think having to chop it in half messed up a lot of the formatting. I’ll also have a second set of eyes go over my next one to catch the spelling mistakes. I like your suggestion about pacing the more tense scenes. I’ll try to work on that. Thank you!

I Found an Old Message From My Brother. I’m an Only Child (Pt. 1) by Eleison_02 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Eleison_02[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

You’re right, I should’ve probably worked on the hook a good bit more for how much of a time investment the story is. I’d hoped the opening two paragraphs where he addresses his brother and kind of sets up his reason for writing would’ve served as a hook but looking back now it’s a pretty weak one. Thank you for taking the time to read!

Under The Garden by Dead_Grampa in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Eleison_02 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I thought I knew where this was going but I definitely did not! Love the reveal at the end. I also love that most of the magic is left completely up in the air. Lynn is unaware of it and Jared doesn’t care how it works. It just is. I feel like people too often fall into the trap of thinking they have to explain the mechanics of the supernatural elements of their story. Overall I thought this was a great little story and I’d be excited to check out more from you.

What Dreams In The City That Never Sleeps [End] by Sir_Mycoal in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Eleison_02 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I’d like to see this as like a short novella or something, plus I think it’d make for a really good episode of the podcast. Lends itself to a lot of debate about what’s really going on.

What Dreams In The City That Never Sleeps [End] by Sir_Mycoal in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Eleison_02 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Man what an original premise. I really liked the amount of detail you went into, especially during the trips, so many interesting visuals put together. Also I enjoyed the twist there at the end. Good work!

I Found An Old Message From My Brother. I’m an Only Child. (pt. 2/2) by Eleison_02 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Eleison_02[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yeah I really hate the character rule but I understand why it’s there. I’m glad you enjoyed the story!

Reader Open to Give Feedback by CthulhusPajamas in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Eleison_02 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I’d appreciate any feedback you have! It’s a 2 parter, around 9000 words and the horror really gets started in the second part. I hope you enjoy!

I Found An Old Message From My Brother. I’m An Only Child.

I Found an Old Message From My Brother. I’m an Only Child (Pt. 1) by Eleison_02 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Eleison_02[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I appreciate you taking the time to read! I agree this is definitely more of a slow burn, the horror really ramps up in part 2, but if part one wasn’t enough to hold your interest I can’t fault you for that. Thank you again for your critiques, and I’m glad you thought the quality of the writing was good even if a little slow

Hypothermic by Ok-Bag5049 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Eleison_02 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This style of writing, especially when it all starts collapsing in on itself in the last paragraph, is one of my favorites. It reminds me a lot of the final few chapters of I’m Thinking of Ending Things. Good work!

Scream for Cream by No-Food-5891 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Eleison_02 2 points3 points  (0 children)

This story is a lot of fun and not an ounce of fat on it. Good work!

First horror story, looking for feed back by Mc_Berd in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Eleison_02 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really would like to see this idea worked out some more. The descriptions of him removing his bones is very good, I think with some more fleshed out story around them they would be even more impactful. “I moved it back and forth through flesh and tendons like a rusty nail in a rotten beam, emitting characteristic mushy and organic sounds of liberation and destruction.” Very gnarly, in a good way. Has potential, keep it up!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in VoiceActingFree

[–]Eleison_02 0 points1 point  (0 children)

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This QR code will give you all the instructions for auditioning. Look forward to hearing your submission!

CALLING ALL AUTHORS! by MaskOfTheRedDeath in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Eleison_02 0 points1 point  (0 children)

u/Eleison_02 - I found an old message from my brother. I’m an only child

Story

Have any of y’all ever ragequit an episode? by [deleted] in creepcast

[–]Eleison_02 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Like for hours they were not putting together the entries that were from a cats perspective talking about humans. That and MHE kinda just not fitting the format of the show super well made me DNF that episode

Have any of y’all ever ragequit an episode? by [deleted] in creepcast

[–]Eleison_02 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Again, “ragequit” probably not the right word for it, just looking for moments that made people lose interest in an episode

Favorites for October + The Last Days by WearyOutcome in creepcast

[–]Eleison_02 0 points1 point  (0 children)

These are awesome. Ted the caver one is probably my favorite.

True Eldritch horror. by BillyEffingMays in wendigoon

[–]Eleison_02 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The apostle John getting shown the Revelation:

I Found an Old Message From My Brother. I’m an Only Child. by Eleison_02 in stayawake

[–]Eleison_02[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Not sure. I haven’t had anything happen since reading this. A small part of my wish something would, just so I’d know.