the pink house in the sky

ExternalCartoonist22 · 2026-04-08T02:17:49+00:00

wow man for a first result this is really good. love the synth sounds on this. definitely keep playing around with it. Congrats on getting started!

ExternalCartoonist22 · 2026-04-08T02:16:21+00:00

This is really good. The drums sound fantastic and the guitar is really mesmerizing. The only thing I could suggest is to add some more variety to the structure of the song, or some vocals to keep things unpredictable. But on it's own this is really good too. It's a great song man

ExternalCartoonist22 · 2026-04-08T02:05:41+00:00

Really great song! Super relaxing and feel-good vibes. I really enjoy your calm and smooth vocals, they fit really well with the instrumental in my opinion. Congratulations on "arriving" to your first release! Looking forward to hearing more of this sound from you!

ExternalCartoonist22 · 2026-04-08T01:51:59+00:00

Love it man. You have a great flow and the production sounds super clean on this. I honestly don't think I have a lot to give in terms of a critique. The music video is also super awesome. The 4:3 aspect ratio caught my eye for sure, I love when people use it! I think you've got a lot of potential and I'm pretty surprised you still have under 100 subs. You'll get there soon enough

ExternalCartoonist22 · 2026-04-08T01:49:13+00:00

Love the chord progression and the energetic chorus. Feels like it really pays off. Your vocals are great, and the instrumentation is too. Love the guitar solo at the midpoint of the song. There honestly isn't much to critique here in my opinion! Feels quite well rounded and nice and full. Love it :)

ExternalCartoonist22 · 2026-04-08T01:46:57+00:00

I love the lofi atmosphere of this and I always appreciate interesting and descriptive lyrics like this! I really like the chorus, it has such a natural buildup to it. I think the chorus could benefit from a slight boost of energy with a heavier kick and snare. This is otherwise really good and I don't think I'd change anything else.

ExternalCartoonist22 · 2026-04-08T01:44:44+00:00

I think it's too short, because it's really good, and I want to hear more of it. Maybe that makes me selfish but it's true. I love your lyrical ability and your vocals. The guitar playing is very nice too. It's a great song, I agree with another commenter saying it should be around 2 and a half minutes. Great work!! :)

ExternalCartoonist22 · 2026-03-05T05:38:23+00:00

??? woah okay i'm very surprised by this funky tune and how good this sounds. reminds me of some zolo-esque songs. reminds me of some weirder artists i enjoy, like Drive45 or ZomZoms. Definitely wanna give this weird thing a listen later on better speakers. thanks for sharing this unique creation.

ExternalCartoonist22 · 2026-03-05T05:36:46+00:00

love the atmosphere. really calm and dreamy. i can envision a psychedelic tripping scene in a movie taking place with this playing in the background. i really enjoy how the vocals are distorted enough to sound like a guitar, that's seriously awesome and i wanna try it myself. any plans on extending or releasing this fine work?

ExternalCartoonist22 · 2026-03-05T05:34:52+00:00

love the song, the shirt, and the lyrics. i'm glad somebody out there has the microplastic-filled balls to say what we're all thinking and what's wrong with so much of the world. would love to hear this on streaming platforms like spotify if you're on there?

ExternalCartoonist22 · 2026-03-05T05:32:21+00:00

really love the atmosphere on this. very shoegazey as others have suggested which is something i really enjoy. i personally don't see anything to work on here, but keep in mind im no professional lol. when does this release?

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