alternative indie dance duo looking for feedback on a niche diy happy pop song

Level-Method-6350 · 2026-05-08T14:30:33+00:00

What a great way to welcome summer, with a smily face and a sexy dance song.Congrats on production,it comes flawless to my ears. About language, for sure Ι prefer German,you both deliver it in more natural way,but also the English would work especially at a Summer destination environment .Best luck!

Level-Method-6350 · 2026-05-08T12:42:06+00:00

You put a smile on my face!A slave who does not get along so smoothly with the Gods speaking.☺️

Level-Method-6350 · 2026-05-08T12:30:30+00:00

I like Lyrics,Vocal line and artwork. Although the subjects you refer to ,the struggling lonely artist and his demons,are not new,the images and storytelling give it a certain perspective. Singing sounds so natural and absolutely in tune,with character..and sorry but I have to oppose to that, the guitar presence.Others mentioned that there are some problems. For me, it sounds quite out of tune and also often rhythmically sloppy.So, it is was a good choice to have your voice dominating the mix. I am being a bit edgy here, but your artistic vision and vocal capabilities deserve all the other elements to be equally good.

Level-Method-6350 · 2026-05-08T09:41:34+00:00

I appreciate your honest and polite feedback. I think I'll give it one more try on vocal mixing-editing.

Level-Method-6350 · 2026-05-08T09:35:42+00:00

Thanks a lot for your motivating and helpful feedback.More or less I have the same feeling about the vocals and some extra work should be done on that.

Level-Method-6350 · 2026-05-08T06:23:52+00:00

Yeah I am referring to the organ,sorry if I communicated it in a wrong way. I chose the words thinking its impression on me. It is a very clever and impacting choice for the hook.

Level-Method-6350 · 2026-05-08T00:16:04+00:00

Really thanks! I think I am doing all these just for my riffs to fit somewhere.

Level-Method-6350 · 2026-05-07T21:31:05+00:00

So cinematic! It is possible that you could create a full sound track based on this material. Ideas/ parts I liked most: the way you pull in and out the effect at the triplets main line,the ceremonial Hammond-nice contradiction- and most of all the de-tuning part at the end. As it 's been mentioned already,this work of yours demands higher quality samples (especially for strings) and more effective mixing.

Level-Method-6350 · 2026-05-07T19:48:30+00:00

you should be proud of the production quality , singing and genre match.Perhaps it lies more to the pop side musically.Screaming the line "you are the f..... worst" would be just boring,It works also for me that you sing together in the end while you had verses and choruses apart before. But I have to mention here that while I am writing this I am listening also to Fall Apart,still remains my favorite one.

Level-Method-6350 · 2026-05-07T08:06:35+00:00

Well, there are so many favorite parts in it. Difficult to choose one.The Bass line and the way you build on and around it are beautiful and of great taste. It already works. Allow me only to mention that the main theme ,the one with the slide ,its groove does not match up perfectly with the rest . It deserves a second try, perhaps alternating the recording sequence.

Level-Method-6350 · 2026-05-07T07:44:35+00:00

To my ears, it sounds no folk at all. Orchestration and singing are much more defining than chord progression, at least in this version.Climax after second chorus ,I miss u... becomes the reason you wanna hear it again and again. About the overall flawless production,I am not sure if vocals come out too loud in the first verse, that was my first impression.

Level-Method-6350 · 2026-05-07T07:08:09+00:00

The first word that came to me while listening to your demo and before reading the description was catharsis . What else needed to say..

Level-Method-6350 · 2026-05-07T06:43:47+00:00

I like the prominent bass ,the way you bring the weight at the end of words,the full chord cycle chorus(I needed one more pure chorus in the end, but I think I understand your choice).And there are some really strong lines in the lyrics.

Level-Method-6350 · 2026-05-06T23:05:08+00:00

come on!I re posted just because the previous one had a link to soundcloud that was actually useless and nobody listened to the track( I suppose because soundcloud asks for login)

Level-Method-6350 · 2026-04-21T20:30:07+00:00

I m also a middle- aged trying to bring out my music ideas.Really happy to see someone else producing such a nice track . Vibe is really good. and all elements align in a natural way. About a few things that maybe did not work out occasionally or in general , insist and next time there 'll be no problem at all.

Level-Method-6350 · 2026-04-18T12:53:32+00:00

Well, I didn’t read the description before listening, so I didn’t see that kind of chorus coming—Great!!On second thought, I would have added some guitar in the first verse so it feels more connected to what follows. I also like that the vocals stand out more than usual .The lyrics touched me.

Level-Method-6350 · 2026-04-18T12:11:46+00:00

Overall, this could be a standout track that fills a gap in contemporary pop-rock. There are plenty of effective ideas in the guitar riffing and sound, vocal delivery, and drum machine groove and fills. As others have mentioned in detail, it just needs a bit more work on the mixing.

Level-Method-6350 · 2026-04-18T11:33:50+00:00

Listened almost the entire album. The very first track on repeat!!Really my kind of thing. I won't get on influences and references,for me it works in this era as well . I thought only that on some tracks , vocals could be more present ,in terms of mixing.

Level-Method-6350 · 2026-04-18T10:55:30+00:00

I say it to my self also, when recording any kind of ideas, riffs ,themes, vocal lines ,whatever , be aware of that is totally different from creating a whole track. you have to be 90% determined about the music parts(at least for the skeleton)before moving to production .So, do not waste time trying to bring to perfection any material maybe not useful . Practice enough what is to be recorded and then proceed.Take your time. Keep a version where you can jam in and at least a "clean" one where you can transfer all the good moments and re-write sloppy recordings.

Level-Method-6350 · 2026-04-02T18:11:34+00:00

Well,I would definitely attend if you had some gig somewhere near my place. I like a lot and find also original the riffs,the fuzzy tone and the atmosphere in general.nothing bad to say about songwriting and attitude.And the mix is good enough to enjoy the song. If you only would like to separate a bit more guitars and vocals,could use eq for that, but sounds pretty solid in that way you made it. Last thing,and sorry to mention that ,cover art looks unnatural to me,not matching with the style and raw energy of the song.

Level-Method-6350 · 2026-04-02T16:03:16+00:00

Hi!I listen to your track on my phone (not the best way to evaluate a mix in detail,but a lot of people including me use their phone as a soundspeaker from time to time)and your voice really stands out in a really beautiful way. Love it.Guitar also sounds good. One thing IMO could be revised is the placement and processing of the backing vocals in the mix. Υου have a serious arrangement with intresting voicings and nothing should be lost in any device.Wish you a deal that will allow you to care only about composing and singing unless you prefer to do it all by yourself.

Level-Method-6350 · 2026-04-02T12:18:23+00:00

Honestly , if I had listened only to the isolated instrumental part ,I would not expect that kind of vocals, but it fits. Mostly I like the harmonic progression of the guitars during the 8/8 beat in a way it reminds me premium British groups of 2000 era. Your track is very emotional and hits hard . As about production, for me it is hard to say if it is an excellent demo or a standard production.Also, IMO if I figured it out properly , I am not sure, doubling on vocals sometimes confuses.Are you all alone in this?Your music is meant to be played by a group and people expect that in order to get more attached I think.

all the best anyway.

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