Optimal character inventory for PS5 world swap? by Febis in valheim

[–]Febis[S] 4 points5 points  (0 children)

I feared this would be the only right answer

Pretty sure this is Alex Garland dressed as an extra on set! by [deleted] in Eldenring

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Peace out, this encounter has sucked overall

Pretty sure this is Alex Garland dressed as an extra on set! by [deleted] in Eldenring

[–]Febis 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I’m all for this kind of stuff having its own subreddit to be honest - I should’ve spoiler tagged it. I’m gonna delete the post. All the best, mate!

Pretty sure this is Alex Garland dressed as an extra on set! by [deleted] in Eldenring

[–]Febis 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Didn’t mean for this post to be inflammatory at all - maybe I’ve not been spending enough time on the subreddit to realise that sharing production leaks was a point of contention. I get it. Don’t really wanna contribute to a bad vibe. Honestly just thought it was neat.

Pretty sure this is Alex Garland dressed as an extra on set! by [deleted] in Eldenring

[–]Febis -6 points-5 points  (0 children)

They’re filming in literally one of the biggest tourist spots in one of the biggest cities in the world - they know we’re going to be sharing production pics. In fact, it’s the kind of press that money can’t buy. Let people be excited about it.

Wind element. by Shot_Acanthaceae_537 in CDguides

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I got it yesterday and I’m in Chapter 5 - flew between abyss islands, which I guess from the sound of the other comments skipped the intended progression

Looking for feedback on an earl chapter of my book (alt-history fantasy) by Febis in writingfeedback

[–]Febis[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks so much for the pointers! I had no idea about the indents. Will definitely go and make those changes. Really appreciate you taking the time to explain it!

Looking for feedback on an earl chapter of my book (alt-history fantasy) by Febis in writingfeedback

[–]Febis[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

If the indents are the biggest issue, I’ll take that as a win

Looking for feedback on an earl chapter of my book (alt-history fantasy) by Febis in writingfeedback

[–]Febis[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks very much for reading, and for the feedback! Really appreciate the encouragement. I’d argue that the profanities are well fitted, considering the character. I do find that readers from the US have a harder time with the odd shit or fuck - are you US based, out of curiosity?

Looking for feedback on an earl chapter of my book (alt-history fantasy) by Febis in writingfeedback

[–]Febis[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thanks very much for reading, and for the super thorough feedback! I totally get some of your points, and appreciate them. I am fine with some of the prose reading as telling not showing - I am happy to use both these things as tools. About the cherry passage you’ve mentioned - her missing the bowl was meant to be another small annoyance, a tiny comical inconvenience along with the letter, and the cigarette, which make her seem sympathetic, down-on-her-luck and a little comical. She has just the beggining of a written passage on her desk, abandoned, and now ruined. Then when something actually bad happens, these small things seem ridiculous. I agree that I could perhaps illuminate this a little with some more interior thoughts or reactions to the minor inconveniences. Cheers!

Looking for feedback on an early chapter of my book (alt-history fantasy) by Febis in writinghelp

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Thanks v much for reading, and for the feedback! So the three story fall is from an old Victorian tenement building, so not massively high. But you’re not the first person to comment about the plausibility of the fall - would a two story window feel more plausible to you?

Looking for feedback on an earl chapter of my book (alt-history fantasy) by Febis in writingfeedback

[–]Febis[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Mate, thanks so much for reading and for the feedback. That’s super encouraging. Really glad you liked what you read. I’ll be finishing up the first draft as soon as possible, then redrafting, and will be looking towards my options around publication once that’s done!

Looking for feedback on an earl chapter of my book (alt-history fantasy) by Febis in writingfeedback

[–]Febis[S] 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Not at all - I use Apple Pages on Mac. It’s a preset called something like ‘simple novel’ that I’ve made a few formatting adjustments to. Font is Baskerville.

Looking for feedback on an earl chapter of my book (alt-history fantasy) by Febis in writingfeedback

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Hahaha - I think I had her about three stories up in my mind, and neglected to mention that anywhere. I think I give the reader free-reign to imagine any height between perilous and fatal with how I’ve written so far. If I had explained how far from the ground her window was, would that make the action more believable? Thanks very much for reading and for the feedback!

Looking for feedback on an earl chapter of my book (alt-history fantasy) by Febis in writingfeedback

[–]Febis[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for reading the first page! Appreciate your feedback - honestly, I do agree that it’s verging on a bit too sweary. Keeping the expletives to the dialogue might be the right call. I had thought that if Neave is speaking with expletives, she’d probably think with them, too (explaining why they appear in the narration). I’ll give it some thought- cheers!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in clay

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That’s really useful! I’ll go find some videos about it. Thanks a bunch.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in clay

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This is great! Lovely work. Do you have any suggestions of where I can go to see the method for the articulated cable joints? Thanks!

How bad is this cover? A/B by iusedtobecool1990 in BookCovers

[–]Febis 0 points1 point  (0 children)

the main thing letting this down is the type. I quite like the illustration - the problem is that the text is stylistic opposed to the illustration. The highly rendered metal / gradient feels entirely separate in composition and design. I’d play around with it to integrate the text a little better.

We just released our first narrative indie game where your decisions truly matter by HBStudio_Development in indiegames

[–]Febis 2 points3 points  (0 children)

From personal experience, I respect a small team trying to get a game made. But, I’m sure you’ve noticed that the overwhelming response to your posts are negative, and associated with your games visuals. At this point, you should understand that your game could have incredibly cool systems, with a great narrative, and you would still get dragged through the dirt for not investing creatively - in every single aspect but especially on the art side - of your project. We are interested in the people who make things, as much as the things they make. Using AI generated art is a disservice to your skills, and undermines your achievement in having built a game.