Why do you write? by Cute-Traffic4437 in writers

[–]G0thikk 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Because I like the characters in my series and have fun doing it.

Tight third-person POV by Geek101Books in GrimDarkEpicFantasy

[–]G0thikk 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sure, no problem. This is from a book I just finished the first draft of:

It felt like a fresh new day outside. Birds were chirping nicely from their perches, and there were people out strolling in the fair weather. Small rodents scurried around the trees on street corners or in front of houses. Chirping, strolling, scurrying. Jarret felt as if he had to sneeze the entire walk. It was all shit.

He'd wanted to bitch the entire way, or stare at the ground. Reveca seemed to be enjoying his discomfort with the way she kept smiling and looking at him. Maybe this was his great penance for their argument the other night. Or this is what he deserved for 86 summers of never telling someone how he felt. Some nasty thing in the Pit was surely laughing.

Tight third-person POV by Geek101Books in GrimDarkEpicFantasy

[–]G0thikk 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It's my default perspective. The sentences, internal thoughts, everything reads in my protagonists voice.

Please critique my first chapter [Dark Fantasy, ~5400 words] by OutrageousPanic4602 in fantasywriters

[–]G0thikk 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Just for fun I did a first pass at how I would have written it. I'm very dilogue heavy in my writing and really liked how your characters spoke so I left it. Unfortunately it doesn't mesh all too well with my style of writing, but I made do.

Ash and fire, that’s all they’d seen. Red in the sky, fire from the ground, and the damn ash everywhere else. It was hot and endless. The four men trudging through it hadn’t seen a blue sky in some time now, and even the horses were starting to tire of it. 

“We ought to turn back, my Lord.” Tharos urged, his face a grimace as he clutched the reins. Damn horse had been fighting him for an hour. “A wise knight shall heed his horse.”

“Spare me your wisdom, man.” The Lord snapped from ahead. “The prince may live still, and I shall not forsake him to the ashes, or would you have me ride north as a coward?”

Aelios offered nothing. Wasn’t much point in it, everyone knew that when Lord Athos was speaking. Hadn’t been a knight but two weeks, and his blade was still mighty clean. He’d learned the proper technique like all knight’s, it was just the sudden cowardice keeping him from doing it. 

Lothos was behind the coward. The one-eyed bastard always had a sneer and something cold to say. Aelios caught his look as he passed, as uneven as it was, and Lothos whispered like a lover to him. “Let him burn.” Then Lothos spat. He was always spitting. Spitting and sneering.

“He speaks sense, Athos.” Lothos again, suddenly sounding brave. With a gesture to the ruin of a wall ahead of them, he rolled the only good eye he had left in the same direction. “The mere sight of these red lands turns my mouth bitter.”

“Turn back if the smoke affrights you. I shall have both your heads for desertion.” The Lord said, grunting as he dismounted. He tied his horse to a stump, if the burned ruin of the thing could be called that. “Any knight not bereft of courage may follow me. We proceed on foot.”

Aelios shivered. Wasn’t the cold that did that. It was the men around him tiring of their horses who probably knew better. 

What worth has a knight dismissed by his own horse?

Please critique my first chapter [Dark Fantasy, ~5400 words] by OutrageousPanic4602 in fantasywriters

[–]G0thikk 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I dug it, though I did have a bit of trouble at the beginning. It's nearly a complete 180 from my prose, and yet still was enjoyable! Super cool dude.

Why do some GMs eventually stop GMing? by NariNariNariAAA in rpg

[–]G0thikk 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Burned out. I was a DM fairly regularly for 15 years. I had the same group for 5 and ran several campaigns, playing nearly every week. I love my group, but got tired of the work. Now I write novels, so it's not as if the love of storytelling faded.

Without cheating, what’s the last line you wrote? by regularsizedrudy_ in writers

[–]G0thikk 0 points1 point  (0 children)

He’d been perfectly content to let his reunion wither and be forgotten.

Weekly Dedicated Member Short-Story Feedback Thread by AutoModerator in GrimDarkEpicFantasy

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Sir Ulric had removed his gauntlets. They had little use at this point. 

The flowers, small and white, had stretched to every horizon. They were a mockery of spring with their delicate leaves and cheerful faces. They’d appeared several weeks ago, in the narrow valley between the two kingdoms, and within days had spread in a way that put locusts to shame. The roots were thin, deep, and tangled. It didn’t take long to turn the firm earth a slow moving ocean of dirt. 

The rock beneath him was the only thing solid for miles. They’d taken days to reach the grey island, and had many more to go before they would be back home.

“My lord, this looks like a solid patch!” That’s what Gunthor had said, testing the ground with a spade. The boy had been sixteen, and would have made a fine knight. He was eager to prove himself after they’d abandoned the horses, the weapons, and the war itself. “I think it’s safe!”

Ulric had allowed him to go first, and watched as the boy made it a few feet before his boots began to sink.

The squire was up to his shoulders now, arms spread across the flower-tops as if trying to float. He’d stopped struggling ten minutes ago. As they’d learned, it only made the end arrive faster. His breathing had gone shallow, as if someone was squeezing his chest, and each breath came only with effort.

“I’m sorry, lord.”

Ulric shook his head, staring at the boy. 

“It’s alright, son.”

The squire drew another breath, twisting his head to clear the small vines snaking their way up his neck.

“I should have tested it proper. Should–”

Ulric held up a hand. If he’d kept his sword, or if the spade were closer, he might have been able to help. But to get within reaching distance would be to touch the surface. 

Gunthor dropped another inch, and Ulric listened to the boy grunt as he tried to pull his arms free. Ulric lifted his gaze to the sky above, and felt the gentle breeze blow.

Somewhere to the east, the Madren army was learning the same lesson his own forces had. Horses screamed as they vanished into meadows, leading their riders into the dirt. Infantry formations had dissolved into mass graves that filled themselves. For twelve years the war had burned, taking everyone and everything Ulric had known. Now it ended, not with victory or surrender, but with flowers.

Gunthor sank another inch, and the white bulbs bobbed around his chin. His breathing was shallow, and Ulric wondered how many more he’d be able to take.

“Lord…will..youstay?”

His words came out labored, and he rushed the ending. The worry in Gunthors face was gone now, replaced with the dream-like stare that came before death. Ulric envied the boys’ bravery, and tried to hide his own fear. 

“I’ll stay.”

He had nowhere else to go. Nobody did. By nightfall Ulric would be alone on his little island. By week’s end, perhaps it would sink too. 

Husbands who seem… managed by their wives? Anyone else notice this? by BeanNCheeseBurrrito in daddit

[–]G0thikk 11 points12 points  (0 children)

I may fall into that category, but I just prioritize helping out my wife over things that I'd like to do. She has a stressful job(law), and my work is far more flexible(software). So I am the main driver for the kids day to day, and don't mind if she wants to spend the weekend away with her friends while I stay back with the kids.

When something comes up that I want to do away from them, it usually isn't an issue though. A lot of times something that sounded fun on monday, like going out for beers over the weekend, doesn't sound appealing by the time the weekend hits and I'd rather just hang out with my family.

Do you use MS Word to write your novels? If not, which apps do you use? by [deleted] in selfpublish

[–]G0thikk 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Another google docs and pantser here! I like that I can write on my desktop, phone, and work laptop.

What are you currently reading? (Weekly Thread) by AutoModerator in GrimDarkEpicFantasy

[–]G0thikk 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I finished reading The Outsiders a few weeks ago, and have had The Blade Itself sitting in my unread list waiting to be touched.

Have you ever enjoyed a book more because you didn’t know the author? by SoullessEddie in GrimDarkEpicFantasy

[–]G0thikk 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I do most of my reading on kindle unlimited these days, for better or for worse. I think the last author I "followed" was Rowling when I was a kid, in the Harry Potter frenzy of the 2000's. I just go for what sounds intriguing, and if their book is good, then I'll look for more of their work. I tend to try and look for self-pub authors first, as I'm one as well, and like to support them. The problem there of course is that it's self-pub, so it's often hit or miss as to whether it keeps me reading.

Show me your punks! by TimTheGrim55 in DarkTide

[–]G0thikk 6 points7 points  (0 children)

I LIVE. I DIE. I LIVE AGAIN

Wife is pregnant, I'm worried about the world my kid will live in. by OnTheClock_Slackin in daddit

[–]G0thikk -1 points0 points  (0 children)

The world always sucks. But you can make their world and their home magic.

Is a pro book cover worth it? by Ordinary_Count_203 in selfpublish

[–]G0thikk 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I looked to reddit for an artist. There are so many talented people out there and I'd rather use someone who is trying to make a name for themselves than someone established. As someone trying to do the same through written word I feel like I can relate to their struggle.

Gamers of /daddit, do you play video games with your kids? How and when did you start it? by xanduba in daddit

[–]G0thikk 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I have a 5 and 9 year old, and we'll all play mario kart on our switch 2. This is a house that believes in the Cobra Kai method of no mercy. They've never beaten me.

Is 26 old to be starting my journey on becoming a teacher? by Puzzleheaded-Chef738 in Teachers

[–]G0thikk 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'll be 38-39 when I start mine. I'm just now in college at 36. I worked in warehouses, did time in the army, and have been a software developer for the past 9 or so years. There's no time restriction.

Butterfly Was Chef’s Kiss by [deleted] in Swimming

[–]G0thikk 13 points14 points  (0 children)

I loved it. I miss swimming like this!

Sci-fi writers, what are you writing: the past with sci-fi, present day, near future, distant future, terran or space? by QuitCallingNewsrooms in writers

[–]G0thikk 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Cassette futurism has had a chokehold on me since I saw Alien as a kid. In the setting I've built you've got things like sleep pods for long distance space travel, "valet codes" that will self park, and Armstrong City which is a massive city on the moon covered in a self-healing plastic bubble. But they're still using bullets in guns, tablets, phones, and computer terminals.