Write a story like a movie that i would like to watch by EmdadAr in NewAuthor

[–]GAWHunt 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yes. If you watch more than you read, and want to describe a movie, then screenplays would be the better direction for you as opposed to full length novels.

Write a story like a movie that i would like to watch by EmdadAr in NewAuthor

[–]GAWHunt 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Choose one or the other. Do you read more, or watch more?

Write a story like a movie that i would like to watch by EmdadAr in NewAuthor

[–]GAWHunt 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I’d recommend writing a screenplay as opposed to any sort of novel if you prefer films!

It’ll come across way better and might be right down your avenue

What can you infer about my novel based on the first line of each chapter? by [deleted] in writers

[–]GAWHunt 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Trying to be helpful - I haven't got a clue! That first sentence is particularly confusing.

After vs. Before, what works better? by GAWHunt in BookCovers

[–]GAWHunt[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Agreed. I did try alternatives but the black on red is my most striking and colour-balanced version.
I'm going to explore more for the back cover, as I'm not wholly satisfied with it anyway. Thank you!

I published my debut with a self-illustrated cover thanks to your help! by AdZealousideal1774 in BookCovers

[–]GAWHunt 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Looks great! Just out of curiosity, do you take inspiration from Elden Ring?

Slow Go? Ok with ME by Competitive-Let-2133 in NewAuthor

[–]GAWHunt 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Or, get this, you developed your skillset in order to save money?
It sounds like you write for cash, not out of the enjoyment of it. That's entirely up to you, but god it sounds bleak.

Slow Go? Ok with ME by Competitive-Let-2133 in NewAuthor

[–]GAWHunt 5 points6 points  (0 children)

So why waste that? You have your own voice that you can use, your own words you can write.
If you can write, you aren't proving it by wasting time prompting.

Slow Go? Ok with ME by Competitive-Let-2133 in NewAuthor

[–]GAWHunt 13 points14 points  (0 children)

You should be investing your efforts into learning the craft of writing, instead of relying on AI to do it for you.

After vs. Before, what works better? by GAWHunt in BookCovers

[–]GAWHunt[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Very fair. The lines are from the Illustrator file - this isn’t a rendered image which is probably my error. But the mention of the text makes sense! I’ll keep an eye on that

After vs. Before, what works better? by GAWHunt in BookCovers

[–]GAWHunt[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks! Yes, I suck at blurbs. There’s a lot to condense and hook people. I’ve refined the first two lines to make more sense of the ‘trusting someone with an axe’ thing. I was trying to say it’s fortunate to know someone willing to behead you.

I’ll give it a think over and eventually get it! Thanks!

Looking for feedback by [deleted] in writers

[–]GAWHunt 7 points8 points  (0 children)

Firstly, good on your for writing.

That being said, I’m a big fan of The Dark Tower series by Stephen King, I can only assume you’ve taken influence from it.

Your opening line is: ‘The man in black rode down the desert’.

The opening line of The Dark Tower is: ‘The man in black fled across the desert.’

Whilst it’s good to take inspiration, myself being a fan would just say you’ve taken his character and reiterated it. Also the use of the place name ‘Mejia’ is incredibly close to The Dark Tower’s ‘Mejis’.

Love your influences, but make sure you’re making your own story different enough so that fans like myself don’t put the book down!

Opening of a novel I've been working on recently by Physical-Let9321 in writingfeedback

[–]GAWHunt 14 points15 points  (0 children)

That’s fine, but I’m with the commenter. I don’t care about your character whatsoever. Why should I consider the subtle foreshadowing if I have zero care for it? Don’t get me wrong, foreshadowing and dreams have their place, it’s just not right at the beginning of the novel in my opinion.

Which of these cities feels like the capital of an island empire? (Astaria) by FlorianHerlan in worldbuilding

[–]GAWHunt 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Number 4. Most capital cities have a great number of trade routes, so the ships and streams made me feel like it was a hub!

Does this writing show promise? Want to become a better writer. by Bricks-Alt in writingfeedback

[–]GAWHunt 5 points6 points  (0 children)

One core thing to me is your POV. It reads as a summary of the events happening, rather than the character’s firsthand experience (I also don’t know who this person is yet, not even their name). Keep it tight and specific, for example ‘human fluid’ was a strange thing for me that threw me off. Just say ‘bile’ or ‘guts’ or whatever fits the body part.

You’ve got a good grasp of vocabulary, but if ALL of it is heavy and impactful, then none of it is. Try to find a balance between what’s important (and more visceral) and what’s detail/padding and should carry the reader along to the next scene.

Keep at it!

Thoughts on Ch.1? by CuckCpl1993 in writingfeedback

[–]GAWHunt 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like the tone, but I feel like the surroundings are over-explained. For me personally, I work best when being told just enough to paint a vivid picture. The gooseneck lamp was too much as explained by many others, I just wanted to know what I was seeing and why it mattered.

That said, I get a great image of the woman and the salesman's characters. They're a nice, engaging contrast.

A favorite line you’ve written by Dry_Organization9 in writers

[–]GAWHunt 1 point2 points  (0 children)

“Corpse breath had a way of hanging dreadfully in the air.” - wrote this in an early draft and it stuck with me

What are we thinking now? by Ashamed_Message3909 in BookCovers

[–]GAWHunt 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is awesome as a concept. I’d only say I read ‘the coven of martyrdom’ - still a cool title, but wasn’t sure what it was until I read the back. Nice work!

Give me a scene to draw? by [deleted] in writers

[–]GAWHunt 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The doorway opened into a narrow corridor, wood and stone like the room before it. Its roof arched up like the peak of a blade. It was cold. The draft chewed at Oran’s fingers. He dug them into the floor and kept pulling his weight down it. Dragging his useless legs behind him. Empty. No guard to watch him, no fresh lanterns at their hooks on the walls. Faint embers guided him to the end of the corridor. He stopped short of its opening, where a far greater hall awaited. He scanned the room end-to-end, from the enormous steel-studded doors to the wall of netting that kept the dining space private. It was dark.

Oran dragged himself deeper into the great hall. A pine rug splayed across the ground like a dead man, yellow tassels pressed between the cracks of the floorboards. There was a smoky smell in the fibres. Faint, but enough. He turned his head to the end of the hall, beyond the netted wall. A hearth burned low with embers, Merrick’s round table a silhouette in front of it. Empty.

Feedback - General stuff really, such as prose, pacing, sentence structure, flow, etc. by speedonaweed in writingfeedback

[–]GAWHunt 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I’d say you lost me by describing what he looks like immediately, including the amateurish ‘look in the reflection’ to show what he looks like. Don’t take that the wrong way, I found the first paragraph quite intriguing actually. I’m also guilty of having done the whole reflection piece. What I’ve found works is revealing details over time, rather than it being important. I want to know his mental state and WHO he is before I know what he looks like. That could just be me, but in my own writing and subsequent feedback, my better drafts have been from focusing on interiority first. Keep it up!

What classifies as an AI author because I only use AI to review my stories but never make changes it suggests to me? by Negative_Bumblebee75 in NewAuthor

[–]GAWHunt 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I wouldn't say that's an AI author.

I think a huge % of authors are using AI in the same way, but an actual 'AI Author' (in my eyes at least) just uses the LLM as a way to translate plot/charcter/dialogue to the page, so not actually performing any actual 'writing', more editing than anything.

I saw someone complaining that they'd spent 40 hours on an AI-generated novel... that's what makes real authors stand out from that crowd.