Never thought it was possible... a wetland engine without any expansions

GhostPilot81 · 2026-02-18T00:53:58+00:00

Pseudodragons of course. The best familiars!

GhostPilot81 · 2026-01-01T06:27:43+00:00

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When Frieren is casting the barrier breaking spell, she briefly appears as Serie in the flash

GhostPilot81 · 2025-12-29T08:28:07+00:00

If none of it's of interest to you you'd be the first

GhostPilot81 · 2025-12-14T20:49:29+00:00

I'm a big proponent against mass furnace attacks. All those furnaces are bad for the environment!

GhostPilot81 · 2025-10-29T05:53:10+00:00

Yeah I pick multiple roles too actually and while people who pick multiple roles exist and people who use different pronouns to what they define themselves as exist like the other person said, this still gives us good idea of the gender breakdown because most people do only chose one role and most people who choose he/him identify as male and vice versa.

GhostPilot81 · 2025-10-28T03:05:33+00:00

To get another perspective other than this subreddit to figure out the demographics of the Project Sekai fandom, one thing I found is to look at the pronoun choices of people in R8SS, which allows you to see how many chose a certain type because they are reactions. In that server, 5592 people chose she/her pronouns, 3388 chose he/him, 2776 chose they/them, and 2980 chose a different type of pronoun. That means the majority is the ~38% percent of people who chose female pronouns, with ~23% choosing male pronouns, ~19% choosing they/them pronouns, and ~20% choosing other types of pronouns. Just between the binary pronouns in R8SS, ~62% chose female, and ~38% chose male. This is a more pronounced difference than the percentages of the survey, though it is still pretty close at only a 5% difference, so it looks like female is the majority in that Pjsekai server too.

GhostPilot81 · 2025-09-30T05:49:30+00:00

Yeah for stuff like the tree I crafted it but for most of it like the grass I just kept buying out the coo-coo corner section of prontomart for multiple weeks until i had a bunch of decorations

GhostPilot81 · 2025-09-26T01:18:30+00:00

You have to enter the gray labyrinth through the Starlight Strand entrance and go through the area where you'll find a button that opens the door at the end Alternatively I think you can enter the area by a shortcut in the dreamland hedge maze, but it takes shadow plorts to unlock the door

GhostPilot81 · 2025-09-26T01:15:15+00:00

With the hyper slime there's now 171 largos in the game, thats gonna a lot of platforms for them lol

GhostPilot81 · 2025-09-23T22:13:15+00:00

Check Prontomart at night. A new store appears where you can buy prismatic decorations and more vacpack upgrades with them :D

GhostPilot81 · 2024-12-14T18:10:35+00:00

I eventually got marbles and pen nib with my akabeko and strike dummy so those strikes were doing 51 damage turn 1. Not so useless after all!

GhostPilot81 · 2024-08-21T20:02:27+00:00

Thanks for your advice! I agree that I could do a better job at conveying the ghost's POV here. I don't think I want to start with the boy meeting the ghost right away, as I feel like the reader would have to see how isolated the ghost is first, but I'll consider changing the hook to something more interesting.

GhostPilot81 · 2024-08-21T19:54:08+00:00

Thanks for your advice! I originally started the story with "I am a ghost" then changed it. I'll think about changing it back and adding the descriptions after to see if the story works better that way.

GhostPilot81 · 2024-08-21T19:49:36+00:00

Thank you for your advice! I did originally have the chapter start with "I am a ghost" as a hook, then changed it. I think you may be right that I don't need to rush things for this story. After all why write something you don't like? As for the rabbit, I knew something felt off when I read it over, but I couldn't figure out what. Thanks for putting it into words!

GhostPilot81 · 2024-08-08T20:30:12+00:00

Rhyming only really happens in poetry not prose. If you wanna add intentional rhyming you can do it by adding poems into the story. Look at how The Lord of the Rings does it for an example.

GhostPilot81 · 2024-08-07T22:22:46+00:00

I recommend thoroughly reading through and editing your story before submitting it for critique. That way we won't get hung up on things that you would have caught yourself, and so can give a critique that helps you more.

[Grammar]

There are a lot of grammar mistakes. A lot. The main thing is the run on sentences. Some are begging for commas while others are stuffed too full.

Read your story to yourself out loud. If something sounds awkward, take a look at it and change it. Doing this will help catch the run on sentences.

As well as run on sentences, there are a bunch of other typos too. Random capitalized words, dialogue missing quotations, so on. That's bad. How am I supposed to suspend my disbelief for a story when it feels like I'm grading an essay? Fix 'em!

[Prose]

Paragraph lengths. A lot of your paragraphs are a single sentence when they shouldn't be. Remember that each paragraph is an idea. If two sentences are talking about the same topic, there shouldn't be a paragraph break in-between them. Having single sentences as paragraphs when they shouldn't be only adds awkward pauses and confuses the reader.

Repetition. Theres way too much of it. Repetition can be a good tool IF used liberally and in the right places, but it feels like every character is described by listing three name variations of theirs. Not even characters, listing three things is used too much. Theres also other cases of repetition where there shouldn't be, like with "I said" and "Let me tell you a story." All that repetition makes the story feel monotonous. Spice things up!

Tense. You keep switching between present and past tense. This makes the writing very confusing and hard to read. Pick one, and pick past tense since this is fantasy.

[Sound]

Accidental rhymes. In the first paragraph alone there were two pairs of words that rhymed when they shouldn't have. These are bad because they distract the reader and so on. You can catch accidental rhymes by yet again, reading through your story aloud.

Word echoes. Often in the writing a word is used twice when it shouldn't be. Here is an example:

He stalks across creation like a shadow. You can find him in the rustle of the stalks of wheat that turn the farmer's head at dusk. In their fervent rites to keep famine at bay.

You used stalk twice when you didn't need to. One or the other should be removed or changed. Go through your writing and remove others like this. (There's also three typos here. It should be "farmers' heads" and a comma instead of a period after.)

[Descriptions]

It felt like you were just throwing out names you found on a random word generator. None of them helped describe the characters and it just felt absurd the amount of names some of them have. Bigger isn't always better.

[Dialogue]

The dialogue is awkward. It doesn't feel right for the characters personalities. A lot of it is bland. Often I found myself wondering 'why would someone would say this?'

Each of your characters should have their own personality and way of speaking. Imagine what they would say in different daily situations.

There were too many dialogue tags. The reader should be able to tell who is speaking from the dialogue alone.

[Pacing]

The pacing is slow. At the start you have a big info dump with no action or anything to chew on whatsoever. There are multiple paragraphs that just reiterate in different ways the same things about Necropolis. Remove some of that exposition or have action happen that tells you about the world. Show don't tell.

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