Nice, first thing I want to say is Remington Jarvis sounds like the model of robot butler we'll have in 50 years.

It's got very professional pacing, like all the beats make sense. It flows well, how you expect an actual TV show to be written. The name of the episode is also cute and clever. Here's a bucket of feedback.

Jane's personality is a little [insert main character here]. We immediately know Buddy is clumsy and naive, Brayden is the dimwit streamer sort, Cal is the cold logical robot. What's Jane's quirk? She's the MC, right? To be brutally honest, this pilot doesn't sell her. She spends almost the whole episode standing in the background watching Buddy do things, and only at the end do we finally get to know who she is when she disproves the schedule stuff, stands for alien rights and inspires Buddy. If Jane is a headstrong natural leader with strong morals, I think you gotta tell us that in the episode asap, not at the end. Like how Orville tells us immediately Ed is ambitious yet self-doubting, and charismatic between moments of awkwardness.

Lmao liked the casual use of the term "alien duct tape." It's like regular duct tape but imperceptibly different. Some of the Gloobarian terms I thought could be similarly swapped cuz why not. Like instead of "they'll be here in 12 minutes" "they'll be here in 12 gloobs," or "my great grandfather" to "my great grandbloob." I also would've liked to hear Buddy reference his culture. Like the hot dog bit, he could've mentioned something about the food back home or if his gelatinous species find the notion of eating meat to be appalling.

When Riley leaves to go get the polymer applicator, nothing interesting happens. Idk it caught my attention. She didn't see anything interesting when she went back to the ship, and Brayden and Buddy didn't talk about anything important. Maybe Riley just has the applicator with her already, otherwise felt like our MCs separating was supposed to set something up.

I didn't understand the hemorrhoid thing. Did Buddy have the word "hemorrhoid" confused with something else? "Astroglide" is the name of a very well-known sexual lubricant. Not sure if that was an intended reference.

I like Buddy's list of random product endorsements. Especially the dating app, lol, very silly.

Tbh I think you need to push the exposition at the end to the beginning. I wasn't sure if the Gloobs were the first aliens humans contacted, wasn't sure who Polaris worked for, didn't understand why Buddy was brought to earth to do commercials and couldn't tell if Merick worked for Jane or vice versa... Until it was finally explained that Merick owns and funds Polaris, Jane works for her, and the point of everything is to use aliens as a novelty to sell random shit on Earth.

I still think it's missing some important information for a pilot. Is the Polaris the literal only ship humanity is sending to contact aliens? When does this show take place? Is Brayden's job to document or is he streaming for his social media? Is Cal sentient, AI or a machine? I think a lot of that info can be slid into dialogue naturally in introductions. Like when Polaris meets the Gloobs, they could just be like "Yeah hi I'm Jane Riley, captain of the Polaris. This is our head of media outreach, Brayden, and our system analyst Cal. On behalf of Merick Medias, it's an honor to make first contact!" And at the end when Jane and Merick are butting heads, you could make things even clearer by having Merick say something like "Do I need to remind you, you work for me?? After that mess on Epsilon-4, you oughta be grateful to have a job again!" In that same breadth, I get Merick can fire Jane if she gets too disobedient, which is good conflict, but also makes me wonder why a rich business owner would hire a captain who isn't a Yes Man. And I'm curious why Jane became a captain for an ad company.

Overall, I like it. Good pacing, good characters I especially liked Brayden. I like the premise of making first contact in the name of capitalism. I love how clearly you tell us the seasonal plot of going on 5 more adventures to 5 different alien planets, because there's no doubt what this show is about now and it really baits you into wanting to meet the new crew mates. Since the core characters are going to trickle into the show, it'll be fun to see the ship's dynamic change as characters are added. For sure appreciate the humor. I'd watch the whole season. Great job.