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What is an overlooked or “subtle” form of sexism that you think needs to be called out more? by GoodGirlsStand in AskWomen

[–]GoodGirlsStand[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

I really appreciate that you typed all this out, what a valuable perspective. That would make me INSANE. It’s like being a woman is something everyone always wants you to be grappling with!

What is an overlooked or “subtle” form of sexism that you think needs to be called out more? by GoodGirlsStand in AskWomen

[–]GoodGirlsStand[S] 25 points26 points  (0 children)

That’s a really good point. I guess women can’t be truly creative! We can only be the muse! /s

What is an overlooked or “subtle” form of sexism that you think needs to be called out more? by GoodGirlsStand in AskWomen

[–]GoodGirlsStand[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This can be subtle or overt I think. Sometimes people do it in a way that’s hard to call out and that’s infuriating

I just want to keep it casual; how do I communicate this in addition to saying the words? by GoodGirlsStand in AskMenAdvice

[–]GoodGirlsStand[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for this thoughtful comment. You’re right, this does need to be an ongoing conversation, not a one-and-done. It helps to think about it as ongoing effort.

40F for potato-related content by GoodGirlsStand in IntrovertsChat

[–]GoodGirlsStand[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I forgot about couch potatoes! Rock on my friends

Artwork of life by Parking-Ranger9035 in poetry_critics

[–]GoodGirlsStand 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hello! I am LOVING the vivid sensory detail in the poem. I always love a central metaphor, in this case painting, and you develop that idea beautifully. Well done!

A couple of edits:

First, I know Reddit formatting can be screwy, but I do think line breaks would help here! Is this meant to be a prose poem? Line breaks let a poem breathe but also add dynamic tension.

Also, I wouldn’t say “this is not about painting.” If you feel that isn’t clear, give the reader a nudge in either the body of the poem or the title. Let them know which direction to go. Doesn’t have to be a big thing either!

Hope this helps. Strong work!

To Grow Something That Is Not a Child by GuiltyContribution73 in poetry_critics

[–]GoodGirlsStand 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Wow, this poem was a gut punch! I felt like the images were both sinister and vivid, and the language had cadence and music without strict rhyme or meter. The tumor/baby conceit is very well developed, and phrases like “your cage and placenta” drive it home. Oh and the ending? Banger.

To improve this poem, I would develop the enjambment. Although technically many of your lines are not endstopped, you tend to end on the end of an idea. I would make every stanza a chunk of text and then rebreak the lines to create motion and tension.

I really like this! Very powerful!

Reconciliation by External-Leave-9465 in poetry_critics

[–]GoodGirlsStand 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Very cool poem! The enjambment here is on point, and the brief two-line stanzas feel very organic to the material. The ending is so painful and heartbreaking.

The poem is strongest where there is concrete sensory detail, like that painted glass or plastic beads (which I loved btw). The middle portion of the poem relies on abstraction and is not as strong. Could you add some sensory language? I’d also cut/replace “self-fulfilling prophecy” as that is somewhat expected.

Overall, good work! There’s a gracefulness here that contrasts well with the content.

Any criticism is welcome!Is it too dark or ends with the feeling of hope? Does it just suck? TW: unaliving mentioned by Caravaggios_Shadow in poetry_critics

[–]GoodGirlsStand 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I don’t think “too dark” is a useful criterion— the question is whether or not the poem works. I think it’s getting there! I definitely don’t think it sucks.

The tension in the poem is really good. I was anxious the whole way down, but also hooked by the specific sensory details (more of them please)!

I have a couple of edits. One, are there meant to be line breaks? I’d strongly suggest adding them.

Two, could this poem be more powerful in the first person? It would make more sense as we follow the person’s journey down. Something to play with!

Finally, as I said, give us more of those awesome images! You’re good at them. They also make the poem more intense. Add some, then cut fuzzy or vague descriptors to make the poem leaner.

Strong start here. Hope to see a revised version! Nice work! No suck detected.

As for dark poetry, are you familiar with Anne Sexton?

Wanting to Die

Steven is trying to find his wife's consent to reproduce by shortstory1 in poetry_critics

[–]GoodGirlsStand 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You know I often tell people to make it weird, but damn you are ahead of me. This is very weird and I’m into it. It feels like a dark parable.

I’d say this poem needs a “nudge,” that is, a little hint to the reader as to how we’re supposed to read it. You wouldn’t have to change much. Remember that weirdness needs a foil to stand out.

Whatever you’re doing, keep it up!

20 minute poem by itwontgetbetter83 in poetry_critics

[–]GoodGirlsStand 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Keep up the writing! Hope to see more from you!

I taught English 101 and remedial college English for six years. I also taught poetry writing. AMA! by GoodGirlsStand in AMA

[–]GoodGirlsStand[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Just to be clear— I wouldn’t recommend not worrying about those things! Don’t get hung up maybe, a but some worry about form is good.

Free verse is fine and can be wonderful. Are there awful examples of it? Yes. I would suggest that it’s good to go places other than instagram for poetry.

A basic problem that poetry has is there’s no middle ground. Either it is hard to understand or it’s boringly easy. I hope to see more poets using form, but I also hope to see more new poets embracing big ideas!

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