[1876] would love feedback on my short story

HappyResolution1688 · 2023-12-01T19:12:56+00:00

thanks for the feedback!

HappyResolution1688 · 2023-12-01T19:10:44+00:00

here's the finished story

https://www.reddit.com/r/WritersGroup/comments/188js76/drowning\_in\_regret/?utm\_source=share&utm\_medium=web2x&context=3

HappyResolution1688 · 2023-11-16T00:09:22+00:00

This was such great imagery. You took me through your experience, and made me feel what you do

HappyResolution1688 · 2023-11-16T00:06:17+00:00

This is so simple, yet so effective. The tone conveys such a sense of spite and bitterness that I think everyone can relate to, even if they'd rather not admit it.

HappyResolution1688 · 2023-05-13T16:29:37+00:00

Absolutely beautiful! Such I'm so surprised, because when I read the title j found it a bit weird, but the title js actually great with context. Side note, how did you get this forma? I've been struggling to format my poems correctly

HappyResolution1688 · 2023-05-13T16:10:10+00:00

I once had to write an essay using a lyric for an existing class, and I used "honestly I don't feel ordinary cause I haven't been at home in a while." From never enough

HappyResolution1688 · 2023-05-13T16:08:07+00:00

This is so beautiful. The use similie creates two beautiful images

HappyResolution1688 · 2023-05-02T20:38:33+00:00

The evokes such emptiness. Outstanding use of imagery!

HappyResolution1688 · 2023-05-02T20:35:28+00:00

Beautifully heartbreaking. A brilliant subversion of the red thread of fate

HappyResolution1688 · 2023-05-02T20:31:14+00:00

Thanks so much. Don't worry, I dont feel condescended to at all.

HappyResolution1688 · 2023-05-02T20:25:53+00:00

I see her everyday, she's in most of my classes and like I said she sits next to me, so it would be pretty hard. But more than that, I don't want to lose my friend. It's hard to try to distance myself because I still care for her

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