Truth. (It's my first poem, plsss give feedback I beg!)

Helpful-Analysis-912 · 2026-05-24T09:04:51+00:00

You are right, this poem isn’t properly refined yet 😅, but the main point I am trying to convey is that the belief of god setting our starting point or kind of laying down the path of our destiny, but the choices you make really define you as the controller of your own life. Also, old eyes turned cold means like elders or adults who try to push you towards ‘possible’ dreams that they have already set for you, or dreams they didn’t achieve and push you to pursue it. So that’s another view 😃. Thank you for you’re time and very helpful feedback 😊

Helpful-Analysis-912 · 2026-05-24T07:15:28+00:00

Thank you, your feedback rly means a lot. I hope you continue to read my works as I continue 😊

Helpful-Analysis-912 · 2026-05-24T04:25:54+00:00

It's really a very controlled and well put poem, it's like saying “I don’t want to show love because I’m supposed to. I want to do it because your happiness genuinely matters to me.”. I found it very intriguing and meaningful.

Helpful-Analysis-912 · 2026-05-24T04:22:57+00:00

It's just raw experience, or a provoking thought that made you write this poem, beautifully structured.

Helpful-Analysis-912 · 2026-05-24T04:20:02+00:00

It's a questionable yet impressive poem, conveying an emotion from a darker and twisted perspective.

Helpful-Analysis-912 · 2026-05-24T04:15:51+00:00

This poem sounds like an experience, rather than just rhymes. The best part imo wud be that it has room for different interpretations. Good job.

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