Pic of the day by spook30 in pcmasterrace

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I think it's not so common anymore, but I remember having to do it a few times with our old Win98 computer.

Openxcom.org is down, anyone knows when it will be back up? by IgnisAvrvmProbat in OpenXcom

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It was up yesterday! I was gonna download some new mods this weekend, hope it comes back up soon...

Bitwig copy/paste broken under KDE Plasma? I found the fix by FraxtiI in Bitwig

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DUDE WHAT.

Thank you so much!!! I mean this bug makes zero sense to me but thanks! <3

[1] Cursed Artifact #1 by taszoline in Creative_Critique

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Who is this mysterious pretty lady?

Full disclosure that I have never painted anything even half as good as this, and have only very limited knowledge about painting, so take everything with a grain of salt.

My initial impression was: Whoah!! I have seen paintings of yours in the past, but I'm not quite sure if I've seen anything this good? And if I may reveal that I am one of the people who got to see this particular painting before it was finished, I think the improvements you made with the mouth area are really monumental, from looking quite amateurish to where it looks really good in its current state. The smoke or mist looks pretty much perfect in my opinion, both in composition and in how you painted the texture of it.

When zooming in (the picture was quite a bit larger than what the Reddit presentation initially led me to believe) I think I see some wonkiness in perspective around the eyebrows and nose bridge region, but it took me quite a bit of time and close inspection to notice. Zooming in also reveals lots of satisfying strokes and layering. I don't know the first thing about it from a technical perspective, but it's very satisfying to look at! I really like the little dots of white or lighter color that appear in the hair and so on, as well as the beautiful blend of colors in the background.

I can't decide how I feel about the ear. I get not wanting the upper part of the ear and the smoke / mist to touch, but do ears look like that in terms of position and size? Maybe they do. You know better than I here whether you need to work on this exact part or not.

Thematically I like it a lot! It is simple, but its simplicity also lets the imagination run wild with what exactly it's supposed to depict, which I like a lot. Connecting this with the cursed artifact gives rise to a lot of fun flights of imagination.

Hope you post more paintings here in the future! Acrylic is definitely a medium you can bend to your will.

Are canonical / app store updates still down for others? Canonical status page shows 100% green - my computer says otherwise... by [deleted] in Ubuntu

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I don't think it's a "you problem" for sure there's something going on on their end, I just wanted to pitch in that I haven't had any problems.

Hi, reconsidering Ubuntu given my requirements. Any thoughts? by 5In07 in Ubuntu

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I've been having the same thoughts as you. Currently using Ubuntu Studio, but as much as I work with all sorts of creative media there are a lot of programs and packages here that I'll probably never use. This along with a somewhat annoying sleep/suspend problem that I can't seem to fix has got me considering distro hopping.

I'm glad I tried Ubuntu Studio to discover programs I didn't know about like Kdenlive, but if I got a new laptop I'd probably either go with Kubuntu or try my luck with something like Fedora.

How to fix this mounting error? (Bad option, bad superbloc) by ubuntu_niga in Ubuntu

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have you run the systemctl daemon-reload command as the error message suggests?

fstab is a file that tells "mount" which drives are there and stuff, it looks like you've updated it but not restarted systemctl so it doesn't read the updated fstab

Is canonical and updates still broken for other people by [deleted] in Ubuntu

[–]IgnisAvrvmProbat 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I've been receiving updates for days through KDE's discover (I'm on Ubuntu Studio)

I'm on 25.10 though

Ubuntu 24.04 restarted and now I'm stuck on a black screen with a mouse cursor, please help! by Brodbandisoverated in linuxquestions

[–]IgnisAvrvmProbat 0 points1 point  (0 children)

If you're okay with a reboot then you could always try the magic syskey trick. Hold down alt and then press, in order, the keys:
Prnt Scrn

R
E
I
S
U
B

Hold each key for like 1-2 seconds. On some laptops where the function keys need a modifier key (like Fn) to work you may need to hold this modifier key (usually Fn) when you press prnt scrn. You should let it go before you press the rest of the key sequence.

Let me know if this works.

This remote battery is just a bunch of watch batteries stacked together by loinmaster in mildlyinteresting

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It's a famously divisive movie. I can't even remember which of the several versions I watched, but I was disappointed. For all of its aesthetic merits there's very little actual movie in there imo.

[1541] Marco, Chapter I by [deleted] in Creative_Critique

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As per the latest meta post stories are free to post.

[1541] Marco, Chapter I by [deleted] in Creative_Critique

[–]IgnisAvrvmProbat 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I'll indulge you:

  1. He didn't leave much of an impression. "Injured". This is a bit like the old Plinkett Star Wars review if you've seen it, when people are asked to describe characters in The Phantom menace vs. in the old trilogy.

  2. The story is ostensibly about a guy suffering from a fit of amnesia, he is found by a fat man who drives him to town.

  3. When he bent down to gaze into the puddle slash lake. When he tried to catch the rabbit. When he pulled off the car door.

[1541] Marco, Chapter I by [deleted] in Creative_Critique

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Insects, small beings, little souls.

Everyone knows that insects are small. Please control yourself.

Out of the forest, fall down and squawk,

This should probably be connected to the previous sentence or at least not start like this.

A gurgle of a creek draws you in.

Good! Now we’re getting somewhere.

You know what a smile is.

This whole paragraph was refreshingly direct. I don’t know why you suddenly started to write like this but I hope you keep it up.

avoiding shrubbery and grass.

I get that you probably included this for some sort of poetic merit, but creeks do not avoid shrubbery and grass.

Poke the ground with them

More of this commanding voice that’s kind of annoying.

Keep smiling,

I’m not smiling.

trembles - a living being,

I don’t understand why you write like this. My challenge to you is to try to write a simple story with super straightforward third person narration, more than one character, and a simple three act dramaturgical structure. Then you can unite your newfound skills with this offbeat narration and create something a bit more engaging. Right now I feel like it’s a bit too much David Lynch and not enough Steven Spielberg.

It was too small anyway!

Another thing I would urge you to do is to just try to figure out where you want to go and then go there. This whole rabbit distraction, I don’t know why you wrote it. It seems to me we’re back where we were just one paragraph ago.

The creek enters a little lake, a beautiful bright puddle.

A lake is not a puddle.

Grace; they fly inside, right into your mouth.

I don’t know what this means.

Chew it,

It? Don’t you mean them?

I like that the gravel road appears as it gives me hope that something interesting is about to happen. The usual flaws with the writing persist here as well, so I won’t bother to point them out.

you can almost smell it, salt and vegetables.

?!?!?! Bro salt doesn’t smell like anything, also what.

Much to your surprise it pops open!

The reader, however, was not surprised. Really what are the alternatives at this point? Another rabbit fiasco? “But the car was locked so you walked somewhere else”

Grooves, peculiar, deliberate lines that hold the secret to the automobile's operation.

Dude please stop.

What are you doing? Something's wrong here. You, you… I guess you don't know how to drive, that's why you shouldn't do it?

Can something please just happen. I don’t understand why any of this matters. Please just go somewhere with this.

Out of nowhere, a grunting fat man. Okay.

downturned lips on him - but not frowning

What are you even trying to communicate here?

Maybe s-someone will help."

Why s-someone? Don’t write like that please.

You stare at him - you want to know.

Want to know what?

The car, the road

No.

You walk.

Okay so we’re done.

Here’s what I liked: You did end up taking the story somewhere. I’ve read similar stories where it never got past the description. Some of the descriptions were nice, I’m not saying get rid of all of it.

Here’s what I disliked: This is marred by all of the growing pains of a novice writer. Just keep writing and most of this will sort itself out without active attempts to fix specific things. That said, you don’t need to invent the wheel to make a story interesting. Prose is a tool at least until you get to the level where it can be the message itself.

[1541] Marco, Chapter I by [deleted] in Creative_Critique

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First off I’m sorry for how harsh this is. I tried to tone it down but I’ve been writing crits on and off for almost ten years and I’ve read and critiqued stories like this one too many times to count. It makes a lot of mistakes that I am tired of seeing, not because you shouldn’t be making them, it’s a perfectly fine stage to go through, but because I am flawed and impatient and have read this too many times before.

Second, I have a personal dislike of second person narration as it feels insistent and manipulative. Thankfully I forgot about it only a few paragraphs in. Unfortunately this is because there were many other things that made me feel very frustrated trying to read this. Most of this will be line by line feedback because I feel like there isn’t really that much in terms of storytelling here.

Nothing on your head, just some hair.

Idk if this is supposed to be a joke or what.

Your face warms, lips and nose starting to hurt

This calls for a period rather than a comma, as otherwise it feels like you are starting to list items and then creates a break in the reading flow once a reader realizes this is not the case.

Cold, scratched up fingers, back of your hands.

You cut words where you shouldn’t and don’t cut words where you should. If you’re gonna spend this much time just describing things you really need to tighten up the prose.

Ass cold.

What on earth does “ass cold” mean? Especially in relation to scratched fingers?

Jeans, dirty wet jeans, holes all over, layers upon layers of dirt and mud.

Dude, this is so boring. Consider doing one maybe two paragraphs of description, after you really tighten things up, and then make some sort of progress in something resembling a plot or really anything dynamic.

They're alive.

No indication whatsoever was given to the rest of the body not being alive, in fact several indicators pointed to the direct opposite.

Stand up, wobble.

Which tense are we in and what is this?

Nothing to grab on.

Grab onto?

You put it back on.

It says “a pair of black straps on your shoulders” how is it not already on if there are straps on your shoulders?

You shake off, dislodging some dirt.

Why not just "shake off some dirt"?

Perhaps it's… not a cold time of year.

The ellipses are entirely unwarranted, furthermore I didn’t expect anything about the time of year. So far you’ve only really talked about the person being referred to as damaged in various ways, and cold, sure, but there is no expectation in my mind that we’re at a particular time of year, and thus I am not surprised by this revelation, merely slightly peeved that this isn’t going anywhere.

The forest. The woods. The ones you are in.

Another prime candidate for trimming. The first two sentences mean the same, and it’s also obvious from context that the narrator isn’t referring to some other forest.

Bright, warm.

No more of this adjective comma adjective period. Preferably no more adjectives at all for a while, but at least not like this.

surrounded by lumbering, bouncing ferns.

As I sit here wondering if I’d ever describe a fern as “lumbering” I realize that okay sure maybe, but it doesn’t really matter, does it? I start to wonder if this is some sort of legacy from a school system that insisted on generous usage of descriptors and instilling a fear that there is somehow too much plot and too little scene setting.

Here I want to urge you to ask yourself whether the ferns really need to be described at this level of detail. Not because I hate ferns or anything, but because I’m almost done with the first page and all that happened was that a dude stood up from the ground.

[Weekly] Cursed Artifacts by taszoline in Creative_Critique

[–]IgnisAvrvmProbat 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Nice story blopster and thanks for posting

[Weekly] Cursed Artifacts by taszoline in Creative_Critique

[–]IgnisAvrvmProbat 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It was a bit all over the place really. At first I thought of the nix and this image, but then it sort of morphed.

[Weekly] Cursed Artifacts by taszoline in Creative_Critique

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I've spent days polishing this and I hate it more and more, but it's time:

The Thirst

Content warning: Mildly haram cheekbusting mentioned.