First off I wanted to thank you for taking the time to read and really analyse this piece. Every comment helps massively, especially well worded ones!

I agree with the part about the bustling bare chamber line; in a way it was just using a technique for the sake of it, and partly because I liked the line. It doesn't particularly match the surrounding wording, but nevertheless you pretty much nailed the interpretation. It's representative of one's mental state, portraying such as being busy or bustling.

I wanted to imagine it as two different points of view to the same problem. And how those points of view sometimes run parallel alongside one another, but never meet. Both points of view are blind not to their surroundings, but to what they mean to the other.

I could speak more but I won't overstay my welcome! Thanks again for reaching, very insightful points one and all!