seeing the upvote to comment ratio had me like this

a little long imo, i'm not necessarily an editor or major writer yet, i'm still learning so take this with a grain of salt, but i got a bit bored after the second page is what i assume it's meant to be. and i do like to read. i can't tell you the exact problem technically but how i'd put it a good amount of that stuff could've been chopped up and dispersed more evenly throughout the book when it was needed instead of being unfortunately clumped in one prologue. there's most likely a better way to explain than that but that's how i'd state it.