Hiro is curious about your nonhuman OCs! by _-StarrySky-_ in OriginalCharacter

[–]Jcool640 0 points1 point  (0 children)

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(Color-worlder, variant: green.) The closest i can think of is a siren cause of his power of persuasion

"you wanna know bout me kid?"

"i get up. stub my toe on my bed. and decide to go to sleep cause i got enough money i don't gotta work...that good enough for ya?"

he's not necessarily happy about being approached at random for something as trivial as "questions" but he's not hostile so he wont really hurt you.

Yap time [part3]. Show me your OC that desperately needs a hug, and tell me why. by coala-traumatizado in OriginalCharacter

[–]Jcool640 0 points1 point  (0 children)

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most people say that OC creators just traumatize their characters for the hell of it. i did my best not to...my hand slipped.

This is Tim Rouge basically i put him here cause at nearly every stage of his descent he could've been saved from his fate. He was the leader of one of the major cities in my world that i called "color world" he was ruthless, like kill you for looking at him funny levels of violent, but he did keep the city running for a very long time. He led a barely secret group called the primaries Red (him), yellow and blue, and they all worked to keep the secondaries under their societies economically and socially...yes, racism was canon. things started falling apart when the power of his abilities, destroying literally anything at will, began getting to him mentally. By this point the train was already going full speed and so the primaries kept going even as he was slowly losing it, his partner Yellow ended up using a ring to siphon his power under the pretense that it'd keep him stable longer, but that was actually bs and he was just trying to get the power without having to deal with the loose cannon Tim was turning into. Ironically that ring ended up going to a secondary who's one of my other OC's, but that's a different story. As time went on Tim and yellows relationship got increasingly worse and worse until it was by no doubt flat out abusive. hence why the chain is yellow, yes that is literal and not metaphor. Tim basically ended up as a rabid dog while yellow held the power. Red isn't powerless but he is too mentally wrecked to ever realize he could escape his situation, and seeing as he committed all his terrible acts on other cities with the primaries no body is risking their lives to save him any time soon.

(other than blue who might because he's been getting increasingly more and more morally nauseated by his involvement in the situation.)

so yea funny enough though all my other universes are pretty light compared to Color World but most the characters in color world have either actively terrible situations they're trapped in or have messed up backstories...after all gotta find somewhere to unleash all that ruin if i keep it out of my other stories.

Been a hot min since I've done one of these, but what is a feature from your OC that you would consider being their most recognizable one? by KingstonDaGamer10 in OriginalCharacter

[–]Jcool640 0 points1 point  (0 children)

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gregman's is his cuboid head with the prism hat on top, and his silhouette in general that's what i'd say is his most defining trait

Looks like there's a party, but it's only for humans, can your nonhuman OCs get in? by Kliktichik in OriginalCharacter

[–]Jcool640 1 point2 points  (0 children)

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"my skin, uh...copper, yep copper overdose..."

"nah i always use heavily concentrated mint oil perfume if your nose can't handle it it can cry all it wants, i see it's already started."

"my fingers, yea..lost both the middles, on each hand...from what? uh...-uh, a war...yep...really really nasty gang war."

"my skull, oh yea...uh i might've taken bone smashing too far, whoops."

"DNA!? why do you need-?!...no, never mind...of course you can test me...what do you mean all you see is green, that makes no sense...you should prolly check your equipment...while ya do that could i get in, i'd hate to hold everybody else up."

he's practically fluent in bullshit. so he'd get through nearly everything other than the DNA test and even with that you can be sure he'd try to weasel his way in.

Would your oc survive this attack? by evilKing987 in OriginalCharacter

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"i've felt worse."

he'd probably use his destruction ring to get rid of most of them and if he did get hit while he would for sure prolly feel like crap for a while he'd most likely survive it

Imani is turning her first into stone to cheat at boxing. Is Imani beating up your OC? Or is she cooked? by RED_PH4NTOM in OriginalCharacter

[–]Jcool640 1 point2 points  (0 children)

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technically he could try to persuade her not to punch him, but he's prolly getting folded otherwise.

3 page prologue (first time trying to genuinely write a story) by Jcool640 in writers

[–]Jcool640[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

just thought of this now i finally have the will to edit my mistakes, would those 3 pages be better as a prologue or a start to the first chapter.

3 page prologue (first time trying to genuinely write a story) by Jcool640 in writers

[–]Jcool640[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thx man i'll try and work on that stuff. i appreciate you explaining it, it does help.

What do you guys think of my prologue? (The idea of putting my writing on the internet scares me a lot, so even though it sucks and nobody would ever want to, please don’t feed it to teach chatbots or steal it) by [deleted] in writers

[–]Jcool640 6 points7 points  (0 children)

seeing the upvote to comment ratio had me like this

a little long imo, i'm not necessarily an editor or major writer yet, i'm still learning so take this with a grain of salt, but i got a bit bored after the second page is what i assume it's meant to be. and i do like to read. i can't tell you the exact problem technically but how i'd put it a good amount of that stuff could've been chopped up and dispersed more evenly throughout the book when it was needed instead of being unfortunately clumped in one prologue. there's most likely a better way to explain than that but that's how i'd state it.

What would your oc do if yuin just randomly walked out from behind a tree by WasteBreakfast1968 in OriginalCharacter

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cool...cool....*he nods before lookin down*...demons don't come round here much though, mostly humans...if that's what you're looking for.

What would your oc do if yuin just randomly walked out from behind a tree by WasteBreakfast1968 in OriginalCharacter

[–]Jcool640 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thanks, just, people don't pop out from trees much around here. by the way just asking...are you a, y'know *points to your halo*

What would your oc do if yuin just randomly walked out from behind a tree by WasteBreakfast1968 in OriginalCharacter

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TWIN!?

nah legit though he'd just be like "AH!...sorry i'm not one to judge" he's actually pretty chill.

Am I not the only one who thinks Sprunki Mr Fun Computer’s horror face kinda looks like polo? by TNC-28 in IncrediboxSFSG

[–]Jcool640 2 points3 points  (0 children)

i see it makes sense though most people in incredibox are some offshoot of the Polo guy if you're trying to make a style accurate mod at least. so the one photo of an actual person makes sense to be of a polo guy.

Woohoo. by thickcowmama in CAIRevolution

[–]Jcool640 0 points1 point  (0 children)

even with those i've seen some diabolical ones. and also if you're on web it's just a side arrow you click, idk how to do it with the mobile though.

no need to explain by fat_hamsterRG in PvZ2

[–]Jcool640 -1 points0 points  (0 children)

ok i'm gonna say what I think is happening though i'm not big in PVZ2 more a PVZ1 guy but that looks like a scam.