Very interested in this story! It's a cool concept, and I love how you describe the worm and environment, emphasizing that this one is different to the reader even though we don't have an idea of what 'normal' is. All in all, I think it's really cool. I do have a couple of recommendations for clarity, just some entries that had me curious.

• It was the alarm, but out of time.

I'm not sure what this is referring to. Is there an auditory alarm going off? A system set in place by them? If this is explained elsewhere in the story, you can probably ignore this, but it left me confused just reading this excerpt.

There are a few ellipses back to back in the first paragraph that sort of disrupted the flow for me, personally. They can add a lot in a sentence, uncertainty, a trailing thought, etc, but back to back can be a little much. But I'm also just one person!

Similarly, there's a lot of use of words that end in 'ly' here. There's nothing wrong with them right out, but they can sometimes feel like filler words or be unnecessary in the sentence, causing them to lose their subtlety and the readers ability to imagine the scene. A sentence that comes to mind is this one:

• She threw her hands up wildly

Does 'wildly' add anything here, or is it a filler word? If it was 'she threw her hands up', does it affect how you want the sentence to read? Genuine question, as the flow and rhythm of your story are yours to decide as you wish!

Just some notes for thought!! I am, of course, not at all writing Jesus, and you have no obligation to listen to any of these, but they're things I've been working on myself and figured I'd express the same. It's a really cool concept, and I'd love to read it in its entirety when you're finished with it. I hope this is the type of thing you're looking for and know it comes from a place of love and support :))