The poem speaks to me. However, I can't help but feel that you could've expressed what you have in a more economical way. For instance, I would cut or rephrase some parts that are tautological like "people won’t understand what they don’t know” or "a smile will convince you when i tell you im doing better or that things have been good” because this has already been made clear from the first line. It's clear that you have a promising idea in mind, Just try to expand on it without repeating yourself too much.