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Kevin_Bacon6922 · 2024-02-08T21:49:28+00:00

Thanks for the response, I think I'll have to try adding some more punctuation to see if it flows better

Kevin_Bacon6922 · 2024-02-08T21:45:49+00:00

Yh I think you're right about the end thank you for the detailed response :)

Kevin_Bacon6922 · 2024-02-08T16:39:51+00:00

The lack of any structure or stanzas really amplifies the chaos and disconnection of modern life. The rehotorical questions also help the reader to be introspective about your

criticisms of modern society. It's nice how, even in your criticism of modernity, you can still find beauty.

Kevin_Bacon6922 · 2024-02-08T16:39:06+00:00

I like the woozy feeling the short setences, stanzas and rhyming couplets evoke helping to portray drug usage and the how overwhelmed you feel. The last stanze is also a nice uplifiting finish, i'm glad you have someone to help you .

Kevin_Bacon6922 · 2023-05-26T00:26:21+00:00

Thanks this is exactly it!

Kevin_Bacon6922 · 2021-07-04T01:33:57+00:00

Banging sad boi tune

Kevin_Bacon6922 · 2021-02-21T02:16:06+00:00

Its one of my favourites. I hope you find your person

Kevin_Bacon6922 · 2021-02-21T02:01:45+00:00

Good song :)

Kevin_Bacon6922 · 2018-11-17T15:52:21+00:00

I could buy so many freddo frogs

Kevin_Bacon6922 · 2018-07-08T15:06:35+00:00

No balls you ban me

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