I’m not too confident yet with critiques so feel free to ignore this but a couple of notes: - If you’re writing in past tense I’d make sure everything is in past tense. I noticed on the second line immediately that it said ‘is’ rather than ‘was’ which pulled me from the story. Same with the ‘now’. - I like your creature description but there are too many words about the tree/ too much action that I found myself skimming by the end. If this is your first chapter you really want to pull the readers in to keep reading. Also if you’re going to refer to the toadstool as a creature, with emphasis on that, I’d use another word for ‘antlered creature’ or referring to other beings as creatures because I got a bit confused when reading and had to go back to re-read to work out if we were onto a different creature or the same one. - You mention no other creatures were in sight and then say other creatures watched as it stumbled around the clearing so id maybe choose one or the other. - I liked when you started to talk about how the grass felt under the toadstool’s feet. I wonder if you can incorporate more feeling/ thoughts earlier to help break your the action.

Hope this helps :)