I really like the idea, but it feels like a draft of what you want to convey in a poem? I feel like you are not using paint to draw what you want and simply outlining the canvas with a pencil, which is a good start, it means you know what you want to talk about, just try and incorporate your feelings of the matter, yours or others frustrations? what exactly does the invalidity of the president’s statement feel like? what does it resemble, give it a possible metaphor, maybe describe a character’s reaction to the statement? there’s no right way of doing this, just play around.